(Prize Review #3)
This was probably the oddest and cutest thing I've ever read. I wasn't sure what to expect hearing a story from a Potion's pov, but this was grand. It's was adorable and creative! I loved it. :) --JennaAuthor's Response: That's what I love about challenges- they give a writer the opportunity to hatch strange little plot bunnies. Glad you enjoyed it ;) Report Review
I have a new favourite fanfiction. Thank you for writing this, it's so wonderful. I actually vocalized my adoration of it with a rather embarrassing 'aww', earning me a couple of awkward glances from the people around me. I could not spot any grammatical errors to report, so I applaud you on that front (though whether for your accuracy or my blind-sightedness I'm not sure; I trust it be the former, however). I shall now proceed to read the rest of your fanfictions. I've read one other than this, and I believe I will not be disappointed. (:
Again, thank you for writing this.
- LightAuthor's Response: Wow! Thank you so much. That really means a lot. I love awkward glances. Thank you for reading more of my stories! I love hearing from people more than once :) Report Review
I loved it! Wow, I'd never attempt to write from a potion's point of view, but you pulled it off perfectly. The Amortentia came off hilariously, kind of like a mischevious little elf, if that makes any sense.
Poor potion, though--he wasn't needed in the end! Looking through its point of view, especially once it was swallowed was really cute, and I did wonder why the potion was making its 'effects' without having reached the brain yet. Its attachment to Pansy, seen by the last sentence, and its overall human-ness was an interesting character choice--I'd think that a potion was devoid of emotion and robotic, but the way you wrote it really worked!
Great job! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you! It was for a challenge, otherwise I don't think I ever would have attempted it. Give it a try! It's actually pretty fun. It's funny to see how inanimate objects turn out personality-wise.
Thank you so much for your lovely review! Report Review
This is probably one of the most original one-shots I've read in an extraordinarily long time. It's fresh, new, and so funny. It's quite different seeing things from the point of view of a bottle of Potion. Amortentia potion. It was delightfully witty -- there's something about the way you write that I really like. It's matter-of-fact, crisp, concise & very much to the point.
I really enjoyed your characterization of the potion as someone who cared about what happened to their maker. It was sweet that even at the end, before the antidote took hold of it, the potion managed to reward its maker. I also enjoyed your Pansy. I was sympathetic towards her and she was really quite amusing. Especially when she told him that she had put a love-potion in his gillywater.
All in all, a very well-written extremely fluffy (as it was correct for a fluff-related challenge :P) story. I really enjoyed it. ^_^Author's Response: Thank you! It was one of the hardest things I've had to write. I kept wanting to go into Pansy's thoughts, but obviously the potion can't read minds. It was definitely interesting to write. Thank you! It's hard for me to go into lengthy descriptions about things- some people hate that about my writing, and I've tried working on it, but I don't do a good job when I'm dragging the story along.
Thank you so much for enjoying my little piece of fluff and taking the time to leave a comment :) Report Review
awh... that's a genuinely sweet story. very fluffy and cute. love the writing style and POV, never read one from a potions POV but I really like it.
(love how you didn;t dwell on the character discriptions)Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) Report Review
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