Being cooped up like that must have been very hard for him. I'm glad you wrote about the happiness that could still exist.
Bravo to you.Author's Response: haha, thank you! it was a nice story to write! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reviewing! Report Review
That was beautiful. What else can I say? Terribly sad, but wonderfully beautiful. It's just... WOW. 10/10 And it doesn't matter that you didn't use proper grammar for the quotations. In fact, I really feel that that would have really disrupted the flow of the story.Author's Response: That was my intention! thank you so much for your awesome review! It was a lot of fun to write! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
That was soo beautifully written!!! I love how you wrote in second person- it made it so much more interesting and fun to read! Great job!! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you! I had to try the whole second person...I didn't think it could be done, but I had to see for myself. I'm glad you liked my story, and thanks for reviewing! Report Review
this was a lovely little story...keep writingAuthor's Response: haha, oh, I will
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This was absolutely beautiful. Your writing style is just... gorgeous. Especially all your descriptions about the rain and the two people standing under it. My favorite line would have to be this: "There’s no danger when the angels part the skies and weep for those who are parents of a child that must either kill or be killed." It captured the sadness and... power in your story. Well done. Thank you so much for entering the challenge with this. I am amazed at what you have been able to do with a simple kiss in the rain.Author's Response: aww, you review made me blush! thank you so much for creating the challenge...I had such a fun time writing because it kind of became a challenge for myself...thank you for reading it, and I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I loved this. (:
I'm normally not a fan of second person, but I really enjoyed this. I love your description, everything. (: And the song Lily sings is now stuck in my head, but still.XD
Great job with this one-shot. It was melancholy, but it was beautiful.
-JasmineAuthor's Response: haha, I had to stick that song in there...it just fit, lol
Thanks for reviewing! I'm really glad you liked the story, and I know what you mean by the whole second person...I normally don't care for it either, but it was one of those things that I had try Report Review
How absolutely lovely. Thank you.
PPAuthor's Response: you're welcome, haha
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short and sweet. this is amazing! it's perfect. if i ever need something to cheer me up, this will be it.Author's Response: aww, I like to think I made somebody happy! Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you liked and thought it was "perfect"...haha, you made my day! Report Review
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