Cool story! Freaking weird and funny! 10/10.. I always give ur stories 10/10Author's Response: Thanks!! I'm glad you liked it. Thank for the 10/10 thats super nice of you :) Report Review
OMG!! that was AMAZING!! made me laugh!! i LOVED it!! new fave fic!! :D you are an AMAZING fan fiction author!! keep writing!! : D i LOVED it!! :DAuthor's Response: Wow!! Thanks a ton! I don't know if I'm that good, but I love to hear you liked the story. I know I had a fun time writing it :) Report Review
Haha. That was really fun! I liked reading it. It was very entertaining. Good job.Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you had fun reading it because I know I had fun writing it :) Report Review
Hello! I’m here from the forums to review this story for the challenge!
I did greatly enjoy your fun little story! I laughed as hard the second time as I did the first. First off, I think you did a really great job at adopting the scenario to the Potter world. I even love how Scorpius is pale ( like Edward) and Teddy is kind-of-werewolf-ish (like Jacob) so good choice there. I think a lot of what was going on was very fitting to the characters, ie Arthur’s muggle mania, Molly’s huffing, Victoire’s temper, and James and Albus prank playing. Also, the adaption of the love potion to the scenario was also great, and, while, a lot of the lines in this story made me chuckle, my absolute favorite is:
“Whoever thinks it would be fun to have two boys fight over her, obviously never had two boys fight over her.” I’m guessing that’s a little author commentary on the nature of a book series we all know and, er, coughLovecough…j/k. ;)
Though, there were a few mistakes in grammar through out the story. The most noticeable was the run-on sentences. I get that your story is from the first person, and that people often think in run-on sentences…so, stylistically, they work. However, they occasionally made the story somewhat difficult to read. But, I don’t think there was anything major lost on me. And, you really did do a very good job adopting the scenario and making it work. Your characterization of Rose made me chuckle, and I absolutely adored your description of the iPod. To end this review, I’m going to quote on of my favorite lines from this story back to you:
“Teddy, seriously, I’m just going to lie here and wish for death. You really don’t need to worry about anything,”
Seriously, great job! 9/10
--FannyPriceAuthor's Response: Wow thanks a ton! I had a really fun time writing this story and I'm glad you liked it. I thought this was a great challenge and made it so I could make an original plot line that I found well...slightly absurd, seem even more absurd. I glad you find it funny, sometimes when I think things are funny, I'm the only one that thinks they're funny.
Thanks again. Report Review
oh, that was hilarious! your story is A-dorable. i was grinning at the screen and chuckling to myself, and you don't even know how weird that is, until you know that right now it is the middle of the night. 2 am, to be precise. so...i reviewed! any other stories i should know bout?Author's Response: thanks! I'm glad. I've got a much longer story called Her Mother's Daugher. It's more dramatic and such, but has its funny moments. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
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