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Review #1, by onlyimagine Imperio

21st April 2010:
W o w.
I really enjoyed reading that! It was so original and unique!
Please update this soon?
It's wonderful ;)

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Review #2, by LunaLovegoodII Imperio

18th April 2010:
Wow, that was great! Very well imagined.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review ^^

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Review #3, by raveneye Imperio

14th January 2010:
I loved this story. The way that you write the spell as being happy to do it's god's bidding really adds a sense of malice and darkness to the spell, which is very good.

There are two points I would make that aren't quite as positive. The first is probably a matter of opinion, but you say the spell doesn't know if she resists, but i think that if it truly was the puppeteer, it would know what was going on.

The other is that it's god "calls" the spell at the end, but it does not go to it's god. I think perhaps something like relinquished wouls maybe work better?

But I know how hard it is to write 2nd person from some of my orignal stuff, and I know how hard it is to write from the viewpoint of a spell (I took part in this challenge as well, I did Homenum Revelio). You've done really well, and I look forwards to reading crucio.


Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I take in account everything you said ^_^

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Review #4, by FredAndGeorgeForever Imperio

10th January 2010:
This is great, I can understand how bloody hard that would be to write, and I think you did a great job :)

Author's Response: Thank you :) The next chapter is being written, obviously named Crucio, and the last I haven't decided how to write that yet ^_^

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Review #5, by pink_rook Imperio

28th December 2009:
The way you described the effects of the Imperius Curse felt very realistic to me and you pulled off second person writing very well (I know what a nightmare it can be!).

This one-shot is very well written. :]

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the first review :) It was hard writing and I ended up switching person and having to redo it all over again. I will be getting a banner soon and turning it into a short collection of stories with "Crucio" and "Avada Kedavra". In the mean time, if you like Dramione, you can come view my novel story "Inconcessus Romanorum". The warnings are there for a reason and it does not start romance early at all.
Hope you had a good Christmas
Happy New Year :)

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