Hi again. I feel foolish. I found that you did continue writing. :-) Good.
I liked this piece also. So sad but Draco learns.
I love to read Dramione but don't feel they belong together forever. I just love the conflict between them.
Well, let's see what else you've written. :-)Author's Response: I'm glad you took the time to review and i'm doubly glad that you liked my story.
I don't much care for Dramione either but I try to write stories that will appeal to all shippers, even ones that i'm biased against.
Again thank you for the wonderful review =] Report Review
Thank you for sharing your short story. It was a sad broken hearted story.Author's Response: You're more than welcome =] my one-shots are usually about what I'm going through. It's how I cope. I'm glad you like it and read and reviewed it =] Report Review
Nice song-fic--- but so sad!
"Now what I thought stupidly. I was so stupid. How could I have not seen it?" could be reworded.
try using a few more commas!
a little unexplained-- I'd thought Draco hadn't killed himself at the end-- yet apparently she did... could you explain that to me? But I also liked how you didn't give everything away.
Fanominal! Really ties in well to your story!
overall: nice peice, a little nip and tucking and it will be great! you have promise with this story so with a little rewording it'll mean so much more-- you'll leave the reader thinking for hours!
--dark markedAuthor's Response: I've been trying to do away with words that I don't need but it doesn't seem to be working out so well hence the repetitiveness. lol. English was never my strong point in school.
I thought about making this kind of like a romeo and juliet story but thought that that was to overdone so I left the plot open. He had left her basically, a suicide note which he was thinking about but decided against it in the end but she didn't know. She thought he was dead So I was going to have her follow him but relized that this way was more intriguing I guess you could say =]
The title came to me in a dream believe it or not. lol. I'm weird like that.
Anyways, I'm glad you took time to read and review and I will definately keep your suggestions in mind for when I fix the errors in the story =] Report Review
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