This is quite chilling and dark, and it's like i'm the one who's the death eater. I really like that you've done this is a different person then normally read.
Is this depicting the battle at hogwarts? it just goes to show that Death eaters are not allowed to show mercy to anyone and that they'll quite happily kill if your not on the dark lords side no matter what blood status.
an enjoyable read
alicia and anne
slytherinAuthor's Response: Yup, this takes place during the battle at Hogwarts. The child killed is actually a named minor character in the series but noone has guessed who so far. You've hit the nail on it. The story goes to some dark places though I actually wanted to go darker than I managed to accomplish. Thank you for the review!
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*Shudders* That was chilling. Excellently written, and well presented in just 500 words... as the words "Avada Kedavra" were spoken and the child died, a shiver went down my spine. Interesting use of similes (yes, similes, not a smiles typo LOL :-P) at the end (the table is set, etc). Nice work.Author's Response: The similes were among my favourite to write so I'm happy you liked them. This was tricky to wrtie, my first all-out horror fic, so it's gratifying to hear that it freaked you out since that was the goal ^_^. Thank you for the review! Report Review
Um... Wow. That was a very short yet intense story. You can easily see the image that you are writing, even though it includes no characters. This is a very well written one shot, and I have to give you kudos on how well you have done this. I am completely impressed!!
Your plot, spelling, grammar and flow are perfect, no one could ask for better!! Great Job!!Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! To be honest, this didn't come out exactly as I had hoped so I was initially iffy about it. Your praise means alot, thank you so much for taking the time to review this, I really appreciate it. :)
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Chilling, my love. A true narrator that grips you and terrifies but demands your attention all at once. I'm in awe; every word certainly does count ;).
LindseyAuthor's Response: It was interesting to dip my toes into writing something so... dark for lack of a better word. I'm thrilled you found it chilling. Hehehe, it certainly does. Thank you, m'dear.
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I loves a good, creepy, eerie story. Just like this short one, written in the very tricky style of "stream of consciousness".
Not that I ever doubted your talents, mind you, but now, you made history. It's not important when and where the story takes place and who it all is about, it's the type of story that you read, taking a deep plunge, and whine pitifully when it ends, too quick to your liking.
Fan-tas-tic!Author's Response: Selamat Zolton! Great to hear from you again =).
You're too kind, thank you! I'm still not 100% confident that this is as good as I'd like it to be but your praises are incredibly encouraging, thank you so much for that. Report Review
this was absolutely fantastic, I have yet to come across a story on here that puts the reader into it, and I must say I seriously did not want this to end. It was fantastic.
Hope you keep writing stuff like this :) we need more of it!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I wanted to try something different with this particular story, go somewhere very dark/disturbed =p. It was risky but I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it as much as you did. I just might experiment more with this sort of technique ;), thank you for the encouragement and review! Report Review
Goodness, that last line was perfect! Very nice touch there.
First off, I'm very impressed at the fact that you wrote exactly 500 words. I don't think I could do it. I tend to ramble on and on especially in my stories lol. But its not only the fact that you wrote exactly 500 words, but that for being so little words it actually was eventful and full of depth.
I like how you could see inside the mind of this death eater and what he is thinking while fighting. Very interesting twist. I don't think I have read a story that has done that yet. The only criticism I have is to maybe change the format. So it could flow better, like with italics and bold print. But thats just my suggestion.
Very good job hun!Author's Response: Aaaw, thank you! So glad you thought so. :)
Don't worry, I have the same problem ;). Which made writing this even more fun but at the same time, challenging. But it's called a challenge for a reason hehe.
I did have the idea of exploring what goes on in the mind of a Death Eater for some time but wasn't sure how to go about it. Then the challenge popped up and it seemed like the perfect setting. It also gave me an excuse to avoid action scenes xD. I did think of that, adding a few italics here and there but since the entire thing is pretty much the voice of Evil, it might look out of place. But thank you for the suggestion.
Thank you so much for this lovely review! I really appreciate you taking the time to do it! Report Review
I absolutely love that final sentence. Seriously, it sends chills down my spine. I really liked this piece, Misty - it flowed nicely and it was very engaging, especially the POV. Made the story all the more terrifying and awesome. It was all very clear, like a spool of film unravelling. I love your use of questions here and there; it's all very effective and, even though there's no name and it's only 500 words, the insight to this character is impressive, almost like you know him or have heard of him. This was truly an amazing read, my dear. I've missed your writing. *hugs*Author's Response: Yay! Stephanie as the first reviewer! xD
You highlighted my favourite sentence! Hence why I used it as the summary and paraphrased it in the banner hehe. I thought it would be interesting and appropriate to use 'Evil' as the POV, especially considering the context of the story. Woah, it's great to hear you connected so well with him. I did consider giving him a more concrete identity but it seems more fun to let the reader decide for themselves who he is ;). You're really too much, thank you for such a lovely review!
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