Well. This is interesting. Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to update as soon as I can! Which is, hopefully, soon! Report Review
More. Now. Or you dead. :-)Author's Response: Wow, great timing! I just submitted the next chapter! That was really just spot on! Hehe. Thanks for the review, and I hope you like the next chapter! Report Review
Alright, so, this is a very interesting plot. I'm definitely going to follow this, because I like light, fun, romantic comedies. I can't wait to see where you take this. It's on it's way to a ten from me.
Darcy.Author's Response: Thanks so much! I appreciate it--I like romantic comedies, too. :) You shall see soon! Thanks again! Report Review
Midnight Writer here, filling your request. Happy Holidays, by the way, and sorry it's taken me so long. I've got a broken finger, but I won't bore you with details. On to the review! (:
So far, this seems like a good idea for a story. The chapter moved a bit slowly, but most first chapters do. You can't have all the action in the very first chapter - it'd be the end of the story right then and there. (:
I noticed one spelling mistake. You put 'witched' instead of witches, but thats really the only thing I noticed. Your grammar and punctuation was good, as well as your capitilization.
Excellent job. This was very well written. (:
~Midnight WriterAuthor's Response: Hello!
Happy Holidays to you, as well! And Happy New Year! Oh, don't even worry about it. I've broken my finger twice and sprained it once. I totally know how you're feeling!
Yep, I was SO worried about this chapter moving slowly and being boring. First chapters are always the worst. You have to introduce the characters, set the scene... it's horrible!
Oh, I'm so glad you found that! Thanks so much! I shall go fix that immediately!
Thanks so much for taking the time to review--especially with a broken finger! It was absolutely perfect!
-Breakaway615 Report Review
So, this was different. I have never seen Rose portrayed in anything even close to this way before, so kudos for creativity. I think it is a little ironic that the child of Ron and Hermione, the niece of Harry, would want nothing more than to work for Draco Malfoy. Irony, no?
I also have never seen Albus as a Hufflepuff, so again, good job with the originality. Even though this is only an opening chapter, you are already being different and accomplishing things in your own way.
You did a really good job of getting all the information you need to get across about Rose's past across, and blending it with current stuff so it didn't get too monotonous or boring.
AlassieAuthor's Response: Thanks! Yeah, Rose is always portrayed as a goody-two-shoes, so I wanted her to be the naughty one this time. :) Ha, and, yup, her parents aren't very happy with her, that's for sure.
Yup, Albus is never a Hufflepuff. Poor guy. Hufflepuffs are so excluded from everything, and I think they're all wonderful people! I mean, they're all humble and loyal. Albus, I think, is exactly that.
Oh, good. I was worried that I might have made the whole thing too boring, so I'm glad that I didn't!
Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it! Report Review
great job! congatulations on NaNo, a lot of peole have been slowing down on fanfiction because of it, but it's great that you won! This story is really interesting. The idea's so original and you made it seem very realistic. Al as a hufflepuff? I don't think I've ever seen that before. keep it up! I want to see what happens next.Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, NaNo was a lot of fun, and even though I slowed down (a lot), I think my writing improved quite a bit throughout the month, and it will overall affect and improve my fanfictions. So, no loss through NaNo for fanfiction, other than slow updates.
I'm glad you think it's original and realistic! I was worried about being too formal and such, but I guess it worked out! Yep, Al is a Hufflepuff. I believe they're supposed to be very loyal and good-natured, and I thought Al to be both of those things. He was so worried about disappointing his dad in the last book, and I think that proves him to be very kind and loyal. Very Hufflepuff, indeed!
Thanks so much for the lovely review! I'll update ASAP! Report Review
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