this stories ok and idk bout the rigby is it an actor?

Author's Response: No, well maybe. I gave her the last name of a person in a Beatles' song Eleanor Rigby.

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OMG!! haha!! i LOVE her last name!! is from the beattles song Elenor Rigby?? anyway! i LOVED it!! you are an AMAZING fan fiction author!! please, please, please,please keep writing!! your so good at it!!

Author's Response: you found it! for the time being I will be working on a few songfics and a novel, that isn't out yet. sorry but I might come back to this story another time, but for the timing being, sorry.

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OMG!! i LOVED it!! made my day that chapter!! penny reminds me of myself! im kinda short!! : ) hehe!! either that or everyone is just freakishly tall!! :D

Author's Response: thanks, i didn't really think it was all that good

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:) likin it :) its gr8 that youve described Pennys reactions after tellig but maby it could flow a bit more- also a bit moredesription needed bt other that that gr8!

I lik the way that instead of having them all Laugh the same you used different words suh as chukle :) its anoying when peeps just say he laughed she laughed kinda thing lolz :)

Author's Response: thank you, i have for the mean time, stopped working on it, but I think I will come back to it sometime and work on it to make it sound better

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its nt the worst thing ive ever read! dont worry :) a few things though:
Tense-it's great to experiment and its great that youre recalling the events in present tense making it more alive, but you have to make sure you keep to it, sush as in the 7th paragragh it should say finish, but mostly its lear which is really gd as it is hard to keep in the right tense :)

Also perhaps less diret speeh and more discription:)
lovin the plot already-very intrestin an fun to play aroud with :D If you ontinue writing it well then Harry's emotions should be very intresting and expresive! :D

Author's Response: that was what i was wondering, could i start each chapter with what harry is feeling and could i inter up the story with Harry?

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It was not the worst thing i have ever read (your words, not mine). So that's not why i'm writing a review. I'm writing it for the first reason -I liked it:] I have a feeling that this story is going to be quite good to be honest:]
-Bx

Author's Response: thank you i was really worried people would just be bored to death reading it.

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