This was beautiful! Your descriptions are just amazing. I could imagine everything Lily did in this story and it actually made me think of my own house, when all my siblings are either asleep or not home. The quiet is weird, so I completely understand where Lily is coming from.
I like the way this story is left up to interpretation. I kept wondering if this day was different from other days and how old Lily was in this story. I decided that it probably is just an average day, but it also crossed my mind that Harry & Ginny had been gone doing something dangerous for a while, leaving the kids home by themselves (making them teenagers). I like that we never find out for sure.
I especially liked the ending, where Lily started making noise as her brother came downstairs, so he wouldn't notice the quiet. But then he did. And it was just so poignant. Lovely story! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I'm always a little hesitant to leave things up to interpretation. The stories that do are occasionally met with some criticism and questions as to what, exactly, happened. So I'm very thrilled to see that the questions that were left here were good, and that you enjoyed them. :)
Thank you so much for your feedback! I really appreciate it, and hope you have (whoever you are) a lovely day. Report Review
Rin, you've done it again. And you'll keep doing it again. Gosh, the way you tell Lily's tale of waking up in the morning and not hearing a single solitary sound is truly amazing. Really.
I love this, really. I'm sorry my review for this is so short, but that's because it's such an amazing little story. It's short, yes. But you explain everything we need to know in just under one thousand words. How do you do it, Rin. How?
Lovely work dear, as always.
xxAuthor's Response: Alicia, what am I going to do with you? Your awesome reviews just blow me away. I. Love. Alicia. Report Review
Dear Indigo Seas
I'm a tad confused on what this story is about. Don't get me wrong, it's a very beautiful story almost sad. But it doesn't really explain what it's about. Still very nice writing i like your style.
A.Author's Response: I think, really, it's all up to interpretation. However you want to perceive it is fine with me. :) Even I don't have all the details mapped out, but it was still fun to write.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Oh my god Rin, that was amazing! Seriously, I don't read enough of your work.
Everytime I read something you write, I am struck by how lyrically and beautifully you write your descriptions. Unlike some writers, you strike the righ balance between full on description and nothing. The description doesn't come and smack you in the face, but sits and waits for you to notice it. I'm not sure that made sense, but the point is it's rich with being overpowering.
You have a really soft, elegant style too. Everything just melts and flows together. It's seamless. I also like how you have to dig in your stories. Sometimes the meaning isn't right on the surface, but you have to go deeper. I love the way you use repetition to make a point and tie everything together. It's really readable too.
I loved the repetition and variations of the word empty. It gave everything an extra quality, tense and slightly claustrophobic. It created a lovely contrast between your said soft writing style.
I love the voice of the narrator. Lily comes right out of the pages and apeaks to you in a distinctive voice. What appears to tell so little actually tells so much.
The actual story. How do I even begin on the actual story? It's so open to interpretation. I can't settle on what I think happened, although the beautiful thing is that everything seems to fit in. I'd love to hear what your idea was.
I love the one line of dialogue at the end. It just gives it one last punch. The line holds so much impact as it is the only one in the whole story.
Oh, everything was just so beautiful! I could honestly go on squeeing about this all day (but I can't. Unfortunately, I have homework to do :)) I feel so useless. There is honestly no critique I can offer you. Bottom line, it was amazing.
-BeccaAuthor's Response: OmiGOD, Becca, you are just... amazing. Truly lovely, wonderful, amazing.
I really don't know what to say. I appreciate the review more than you probably know, seeing as my writing esteem has been kind of low as of late. This just... cheered me right up. Gah. You're amazing.
this was very well written and i really liked itAuthor's Response: Thank you very much. I really appreciate the review. :) Report Review
It's a great story, Lily was telling it right? or was James I couldn't quite figure it out but I am not the brightest.Author's Response: Yeah, it was Lily. :) Thanks so much for the review! I appreciate it. Report Review
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