It's good! But it was really kinda scary, specially because I feel so bad for Draco during the times of Half Blood Prince.. But you have captured his emotions wellAuthor's Response: I adore writing horror, but I always go off in some other rambling direction and confuse myself. I was scared of posting this, but I'm glad it worked out and I'm proud of it. Thank you :) Report Review
I quite liked this. It isn't exactly what I had imagined Draco's frame of mind was at the time, but its quite an unusual and thought provoking piece; very nice. I also liked the idea of the white room as opposed to a black one, which usually is associated with claustrophobia and such. I wasn't keen on the black hole bit though as it seemed to create a break in what I would've imagined would be a never ending period of time, trapped in a white room which never changed no matter what you did to try and get out.Author's Response: Thank you. Also thank you for telling me your actual thoughts, because this story might be getting a little tweak, and you've definitely helped.
Thanks again. Report Review
I think that you did pretty well, you did well with description. However, it was a but confusing. But, all in all, good job!!! :)Author's Response: Yeah, a lot of people have said that. I think it's a good thing, because that's sort of what I was aiming for. Because Draco's life is so confusing itself.
Thank you :) x Report Review
well, you did convey all of the above, and yes it was rather confusing, but it was really quite good.Author's Response: Yes, reading over it it must seem confusing, but it's sort of what I was going for. Well, not to create confusion, but an abstract sort of reality.
And thank you very much. Report Review
This is great. The insight to Draco's mind, the feeling of being helplessly trapped by the things he had to do, you conveyed wonderfully. Full marks.
~LilyFireAuthor's Response: It was really difficult to write, unsuprisingly. You can tell :P
Thank you sooo much Report Review
Well, I wasn't sure which story you wanted me to review, so I sort of randomly picked one :)
But I think you did a good job describing how he must/could have felt during HBP. The fear and the feeling that he was nothing but a puppet in others' hands seem quite real. I can see how this must've been difficult to write, but it's nicely done :) Eep, hopefully I won't dream of a white room tonight :|Author's Response: Thank you.
Naww, it'd be good if you dreamt of a white room, that means I've done my job. Yeah, giving children nightmares is my new occupance; check out my CV ;)
Thanks x. Report Review
Very, very nicely done. I'm too sleepy right now to leave a proper review, but I'll be back. I don't see much of this sort of stories around on this site. Mostly it's fluff here, pure and simple. no one really touches the issues that you do here. Delicious, dear.
Lovely SlytherinessAuthor's Response: A good enough review for me, I thank you very sweetly. (sorry, watching Wizard of Oz) XD
x Report Review
I actually found this little snippet quite intriguing. I really liked the way you portrayed the way he kept falling into the black hole when he kept failing. In my opinion, I think it described Malfoy's situation very well. Though it was kind of morbid, I think it was perfect. ;]
10/10, love. Cheers.Author's Response: Thank you very much XD Report Review
awesome!i love this chapter! how did u no what malfoy was thinking during The Half Blood Prince? awesomeAuthor's Response: I didn't, I made it up :D
Thanks x Report Review
I thought you captured Draco's state of mind brilliantly in this, it was abstract but in a way that emphasized how he was feeling on the inside.
And I think you conveyed his sense of claustrophobia about his task and failures well
Yeah, it was a really good piece =]
I enjoyed reading
spam_up_samAuthor's Response: Thank you very much :D x Report Review
*He fell, crashing to the ground with a sickening thud, but he did not response.
I think the word you were looking for there was respond.
Otherwise, I think this was interesting. I would have liked it if it were a bit longer, perhaps, but otherwise it was a curious read. I particularly liked the last line.Author's Response: Oh damn, thanks for telling me.
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection