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Review #1, by Geeky-DMHG-shipper 2 yrs, 3 wks, 4 days, 20 hrs, and 53 minutes

10th January 2010:
Oops...the last comment I made was supposed to be for another fan-fic. Sorry!

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Review #2, by Geeky-DMHG-shipper 2 yrs, 3 wks, 4 days, 20 hrs, and 53 minutes

10th January 2010:
I love this fan-fiction! It's amazing. And hilarious. Update, please? :)

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Review #3, by Geeky-DMHG-shipper 2 yrs, 3 wks, 4 days, 20 hrs, and 53 minutes

10th January 2010:
Update, please! It's so good, but I want the next chapter soon! 10/10 =3

Author's Response: I'm glad that you like this story. It is definitly one of my favorites that I'm in the process of writting. I'm working on my second Ch. for this story as we speak, but it won't be posted on as often as Fate will be. I have been putting that story on hold for more than a year, and it's high time that I finish it. Look for the next chapter to be posted soon. If you have anything that you would like Everleigh to do or be a part of, let me know and I'll work it in. Thanks for reading! RM

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Review #4, by TwistedStyx 2 yrs, 3 wks, 4 days, 20 hrs, and 53 minutes

16th December 2009:
Here again, your biggest weakness seems to be the lack of careful proofreading, or having someone to beta for you. I shan't say anything further on the matter.

I love how you count down the time as the title of the chapter. Very original, and quite charming really.

I am a bit curious about your character now. It seems to me that the statement of her condition was a bit rushed; I'd think that any teenager would first ask a great many questions about their birth father, and/or spend at least a few days around them before letting on. Whether this is a result of a rushed storytelling, or simply a reflection on the personality of Everleigh is yet to be decided.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like that I use the time limit as my chapter titles. I hoped people wouldn't hate that. The fact that her condition was brought to Snapes attention so soon was planned out, and I hope that I didn't make a mistake in jumping too it. This characters personality is shaped to be alot like mine. Before I ever would have asked questions and tried to get close I would have to inform him of that situation. Yet again, I hope it wasn't a mistake. I hope you keep reading. This story is being posponed temporarily. I have two others I have to re-write and finish. Thanks again for the review!

RM


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Review #5, by TwistedStyx Everleigh Alandra Dacus, uh, I mean, Snape

16th December 2009:
First and foremost, I suggest proofreading and/or finding someone to beta your work. Preferably the latter, and someone who is a better writer than yourself, so that you may improve (not saying you're bad or anything, just that even a professional writer should always try to improve, and sometimes that means looking at other writers).

And while we're on that note, remember that it is a bad habit to abbreviate your words.

Otherwise, nice prologue. It caught my interest, and kept it for the entire page; the one thing that, when failed, is the bane of most talented writers.

I'm usually not a fan of stories told in first person, as writers use that as an excuse to circumvent proper English and decent composition. You may or may not turn out to be an exception to my distaste. Though stories in first person usually seem amateurish, if you are able to pull it off, you will be a much better writer for it.

Onto the second chapter then.

Author's Response: I assure you I do proofread my stuff. Although, a Beta wouldn't be a bad idea. I have no idea how to go about finding one, simply because I'm a picky type of person. Thanks you for the review. I appreciate anything that can help me improve, and I appreciate that you can criticize my writing without being tactless and cruel. Thanks again!

RM


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