Um, well that was interesting but there are numerous amount of spelling errors and if you are going to write this i think you should continue it so that Lily has to be sent back home.Author's Response: ok thanks for the input! Report Review
this was sweet.
There were just a few spelling and grammar issues that I spotted, one being that when somebody talked like..."Hello," she said, you putt he comma outside it.
When she says "I'm not to young," or when her brother says it, the "to" here should be "too".
But I would of liked to read more on what happened to Lily when they found out what she had done...it just kind of ended :)
keep writing.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I will write more asap! Report Review
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