again very good- i reallly like the flicking between the two characters-its very clever and really makes the reader alert. good mixture of short and complex sentences! would love to read more!

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wow! amazing-i would never have thought to carry on the story this way!very cleverly written with a dark idea that could threaten to destroy all! well done-look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: thank you my love (: Second chapter is up and am writing the third (:

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souch, that was pretty good (: i want ot know what happens now! WRITE IT QUICK! lovee you

Author's Response: Thanks babe (: am writing the second chapter as we speak, should have it up soon :D x

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Good Start and idea. Cant wait to find out what happens next. Please keep writing.

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Awesome beginning and please write more as this story sounds intrigiuing.

Author's Response: will do
thanks for reading

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*Gulps* dear merlin, this can't be good

Author's Response: hehe :D make sure you check back to see what happens :D x

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Really Really Good! well done can't wait for the next chapter keep up the good work!
x

Author's Response: thanks hun! Good luck with yours too :D x

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