Woah, nice surprise here at the end of the chapter. I can't wait for Hermione's reaction. I am hoping that it will be a good one. I like how the boys are clueless. I hope they stay that way for quite a while.
I think things are progressing nicely. The way that you have grown the feelings between the two is nicely done.
Good jobAuthor's Response: haha thnx again Report Review
Not a bad job here. There might have been a little more detail in the beginning. Like - when Ginny and Hermione jumped, were they just surprised or were they upset at being disturbed? Just a little more to give added meaning. This is just a thought mind you, not a criticism.
You did a nice job.Author's Response: yea thnx...ill keep that in mind Report Review
An interesting start to the fic. I like how the feelings are progressing slowly at first. You give it a good description. Usually I say that 600 words is not enough detail, but I can't think of where to put in more, so I conclude that you have enough. I also like the dialog you put in.
Good jobAuthor's Response: thanks glad to hear u like Report Review
OMG this is erm different? :LAuthor's Response: its supposed to be different...is it different in a good or bad way? Report Review
this is good.
it not going too fast. like they on the bed and now they kissing. not they marry.all in one chapter
i really like this.
update soon please
10/10Author's Response: glad to hear u like this...next chapter is in progress so it should b up soon Report Review
i love it.
it a good slash story.
i love slash storys.
10/10Author's Response: thnx i will keep writin...hope u like the rest of the story... Report Review
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