Reading Reviews for Ginnie's Beauty Eilixer
  
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Review #1, by Sophia One

11th February 2010:
No offense-but I hate it.
I shall now list my reasons.
1. I can barely read the first paragraph. It's called the enter key, and it does wonders.
2. But I didn't need to tell you this, because I would cut out the whole first paragraph.
Just start when she's taking the potion, no need to say what she looked like before.
And it makes her a bit TOO pretty. Tone down the prettiness, or don't make her be this pretty the whole story, or you will have two things. A Mary-Sue, and an enraged Fia ripping you apart.
P.S. I will never trust a model again. How do I know they don't go to Hogwarts and get beauty potions?
3. WORK ON YOUR SPELLING AND GRAMMAR, FOR THE LOVE OF LITTLE GREEN, FUZZY TOMATOES.
I'm sure there wasn't "load" cough. If there was, would this consist of a dump truck piling a load of coughs on Ginny's and Hermione's heads?
4. Put some more emotion in here, for the love of pink sparkling unicorns. Or else it's bor-ring.
I like the plot, though. Improve it and it might have hope.

Author's Response: I agree with everything your saying!

I hate it to I wrote it like a year ago and didn't bother editing it, I was just seeing what responce it would get. I promise I'm a better writer now!


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Review #2, by Lynne One

4th November 2009:
awesome! but i think u should kind of touch up a bit on ur grammar and spelling. sometimes i don't think i can really understand what u r trying 2 say. thx! and love the plot and suspense! keep writing!

Author's Response: Yeah I'll take that in to acount and try and get better thank you, I will do.

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Review #3, by lighteningbolt  One

4th November 2009:
Um, if the grammar and spelling is an issue, type it up on Microsoft Word and run a Spell Check. That should do it. But it is a bit "bumpy." It's hard to really keep up because it isn't so specific.

Author's Response: My microsoft thing ran out so i dont have it any more but im getting it soon and thank you x

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Review #4, by mikalily One

4th November 2009:
hmmm wats going on??? keep going cant wait to read the next chapter

Author's Response: Haha Never you mind :) lol yeah the enxt chapter should be up sometime this week x

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Review #5, by Zoe Lovegood One

4th November 2009:
I like it. I mean you have some spelling and grammer mistakes, but still. Hurry up and make more :)

Author's Response: Dont worry when im done with my homework the next chapter will be up :) So keep a look out for that.

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