5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Harry and Ginny  Dates, Squeals, Quiddetch

9th February 2010:
great chapter and i like how u write from Indira's POV however i found some mistakes.
1. Hemade me feel - He made me feel
2. demontors - Dementors
3. Quidetch - Quidditch

i hope i could help u. will u update soon please? also, when r u updating the story of Teddy and Victoire with Ryan and Sara?^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

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Review #2, by Harry and Ginny First Day and Some Dueling

14th November 2009:
this chapter was sweet with all the things Indira thought during her day and how Albus was really close to her. maybe u could have Albus' POV on what he thinks about Indira. by the way, u wrote "I feel asleep with a smile" when it should be "I fell asleep with a smile." will u update soon please?^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

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Review #3, by raberbar First Day and Some Dueling

12th November 2009:
Honestly, I liked the first chapter better. Towards the end of this chapter, the sentences seemed to become a little too simple and choppy, and that creates a really fluffy appearance, a little too much for me. I did pick up a few minor mistakes, typos.

Cheesy, but cute as well!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try not to put to much fluff. Thanks for reviewing and your honesty!:)

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Review #4, by Harry and Ginny Train rides,talks and fights.

27th October 2009:
great start 4 the 1st chapter however u wrote "Headmaster McGonagall" when it should be "Headmistress McGonagall". by the way, where's the banner i made 4 u? i saw this one but it isn't the one i made.^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

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Review #5, by raberbar Train rides,talks and fights.

27th October 2009:
Yay, more Al, he's my favourite!

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