Slytherin house isn't THAT bad. You make it sound like everybody there except Blaise evil, which isn't true. People can change. You make them sound like aliens, like they aren't people... but they are! I'm sorry if this review has offended you in any way, I just wanted to let you know my opinion. ^^Author's Response: Please, don't be sorry. I'm sorry if I offended YOU. Truthfully, this was misnamed and I just liked the banner so much I've never changed it. I should have named it I am a Death Eater because the stereotypes I was working from were not of Slytherins specifically, but of Voldemort's followers from the First War. I admit, there are stereotypes about the typical attitudes of Slytherin students I took from the Sorting Hat's songs, but for the most part, I wanted to show a different side of future Death Eaters. I really appreciate you said all this to me and I want you to know that I of course don't believe all Slytherins are bad because no person is all bad. I was merely working from stereotypes to create contrast, a common writing technique I'm fond of. (I also ask you a little leeway, I wrote this when I was fourteen and haven't really done much besides conventions editing since.)
I sincerely thank you for reviewing. It takes a lot of courage to submit a review like this; I know I find it difficult sometimes to be as brutally honest as you were. Report Review
This was good, and you really dug into Blaise's realistic emotions. You gave a good background to the story and easily portrayed his feelings. The only way I think you can better your writing is to extend your vocab, although i really liked this piece. it was simple, but deep. Good Job :)Author's Response: Why thank you. And thanks for the advice--writers always want that! Report Review
An interesting point of view. Zabini showing regret is something that I have never read before. You can see his doubt in the story you write. I would love to see if he actually does something about it. You might want to write another chapter saying that.
Nicely writtenAuthor's Response: Thank you. I am glad the emotion I wanted to come through came through. Report Review
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