aw I love Bill/Fleur and their little family! Report Review
Hi! leannemariesnape with your review!
I really liked your chapter image... It is very pretty :)
So, I really liked how Bill and Fleur were not used to having such a quiet baby... I thought you characterised the children very well. The dialogue was very good. I thought it was a nice touch that the two girls seemed to have some very Veela-ish characteristics. I thought it was a nice touch that she thought about her Dad and how he never said anything to Fleur about raising Veelas.
It was also a good touch with Bill, and the insomnia of Fleur, and it was also good to have Fleur's accent throughout, making it seem all the more canon.
I can't reallt see any problems with this...
A good, enjoyable, thoughtful fic :)
LeanneAuthor's Response: Yeah, it has always been a pet peeve of mine when Fleur suddenly becomes completely British, especially when we see her with that thick accent.
As the child of foreign parents, I can tell you those accents do not go away, no matter how much time you spend in another country. Report Review
Hi, Aderyn here for your review.
This is a very nice oneshot. A lot of people skip from writing about newly wed Bill and Fleur to writing about their children, so it's nice to see the in-between. The writing feels sort of slow, but in this cause, it's nice, almost calming. Even though there is some argument, it's a generally upbeat and reflective story.
You have some really nice moment, like the part where Fleur explains her arguing to her daughters- so cute! And I'm very impressed that you managed to keep Fleur's accent up the whole time.Author's Response: Yeah, it's always a pet peeve of mine when Fleur is suddenly perfectly British in stories, so I wrote this story to practice Fleur's accent. Report Review
This was such a refreshing read. I never really gave much thought to the motherly side of Fleur. I think I always saw her as the prom queen, pretty girl, you know? I like this side of her, because it just makes sense. This was amazing, and you're a wonderful writer! (: Keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words (and hopes maybe you'll direct some more towards the other stories). Report Review
This was such a sweet, fluffy, and cute one-shot that it almost brought me to tears. I loved Fleur's characterization in this, and Bill seems like the gentle, caring father. 10/10!
-ronhermione4evrAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like it, and I hope you can be persuaded to maybe take a peek at some of my other stories too. Report Review
cute fic this one. i liked it.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like it, and I hope you will look in on some of my other oneshots. Report Review
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