Ohhh my gosh.

There are no words for this fabulous piece. It's beautiful. Your language and vocabulary make this story feel like a song or poem. You are able to draw sooo many emotions into the thoughts

I'm so glad you posted this. This is a brilliant piece to allow your talent to shine. Everything was captured splendidly. Peters character had such an interesting take in this and so did albus's relationship with Danielle.

Oh my gosh, amazing. This is such a perfect romance. It's all about thought and what really lies in a relationship.

Excellent!

10/10

Author's Response: Like a song or a poem? Funny you should say that given my general dislike for poetry - does my head in, poetry does. However, I'm incredibly pleased that you enjoyed reading it.

Hell yeah, Peter's character just makes things between Danielle and Albus entirely... messy. He's insanely in love with her, and she with Peter, and Peter's actual identity only renders this eternal triangle all the more... complicated. The dramatic irony, however, can be enjoyed only by me as the reader is entirely oblivious as Albus is.

THanks again for this awesome review.

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Um... wow? Does that sum it up enough? I hope it does, because that's about all I can say right now.

Firstly, the story wasn't too vague, not at all. What you said in your author's note was perfectly true; it all happened in a moment. The unknown 'Peter' who was buried somewhere in Danielle's memories and poked and prodded at Albus from where ever he was hidden was only the beginning. The fact that Albus was so true to his love, so aware of it, so ready to wait for Danielle to love him back... it was an amazing story.

Your writing is stunning. The use of vocabulary, how you interrupted his thoughts every now and then with 'her eyes!'... it completely and totally captured me. Your description is beyond praise. I was just floored by the beauty and complexity of your writing. It wove a story into a few stolen glances. It was incredible. I probably missed half the meaning of the story, but I was amazed anyway. I have nothing to suggest. 10/10

~lllb

Author's Response: Wow. Thanks, thanks SO MUCH for such an amazing review. This story is kinda really close to my heart, because it's a spin-off of my novel length fic, and I've got so attached to the characters of my novel-length fic that I was dreading how this'd be recieved. I don't think I've ever felt as unsure while requesting a review as I felt while requesting for this. SO I can't possibly tell you how much this means to me.

I'm glad you didn't find the story vague, because as the writer I have like about 38 chapters worth backstory about both Albus and Danielle, most of which wasn't written in this fic. So to directly plunge into this depriving a reader of all the details and yet be told it was enjoyed is gratifying and incredible.

Haha1 Peter is no much 'unknown' as you might think. It's just a codename Danielle uses to refer to someone very, very, very close to Albus, which I think heightens the complexity and messiness of the love triangle.

Thanks again for this absolutely marvellous review.

- Renee



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