This looks like a lot of fun. Wish you would decide to turn it into a longer story--a novel would be fun to read from this view point... Here's hoping you will be inspired to do so. :>)Author's Response: Thank you so much. i never really had any plans to expand this story beyond where it ended. I think that where it ends will make all readers fill in their own idea of exactly where it might go in the future. I've written two novel length ones already, so I know what it took to write those. One tooke me 6 months to write. The other long one took 4 years. Since then I've been a bit shy of committment as you might expect. The one-shots are the result. I hope you'll take the time to read all of the others and hopefully enjoy them as well. I am currently writing yet another one-shot to add to the list. Thanks again. Happy reading. Report Review
Alrighty.WOW, just WOW! Once again you never cease to amaze me with your interesting story ideas and writing! First and foremost, this one-shot was amazing not just due to the writing (which was awesome!) but due to the plot idea itself. Not many fanfiction writers seem too comfortable delving into the characters when they are in their golden years, and frankly that could be some of the most interesting times in their lives to explore! So kudos to you on branching out into that realm - it really worked wonderfully in this!
Secondly, given that I've worked with the elderly a LOT, I have to say that I love the realism here. One of the units I now work at in the hospital is the terminally ill/hospice unit, and we naturally have a lot of elderly individuals in that unit, and one thing that happens when you have patients there that are still capable of talking is that you just talk to them, a LOT! I had the wonderful pleasure of speaking with one who laughingly told me that people his age do not date, but that they love companionship after their spouse - the love of their life - has died, and that often they really crave the platonic companionship of someone of the opposite sex because it provides a different viewpoint of the world. I always thought that was an extremely interesting and deep point that the man made, and in this story George has just personified it completely. I completely and absolutely love George's outlook on running into Pansy - he is simply too old for grudges, dating immediately, and simply just wants someone to talk to for companionship. The emotions just fly off the page here.
Which brings me to my third point: The emotions! The emotions fly off the page here, from his despair and reflection on life as he downs his shots (something that I think most of us have done at one point or another in life when we have lost a friend or a loved one - drinking to their memory with shot glasses!) to the mischievous streak that he still has as he goes to sit down with Pansy, to the sudden realization that he doesn't want to mess with her and is actually enjoying talking to her! The emotions are just all there, and his son's emotions are there as well. I love that the son Fred was so worried about his father, and worried about what might pull him out of his depression. There's a point in life (so many of the patients tell me anyway) where just when you think that life is no longer capable of giving you anything else, and only taking things away, that it suddenly gives you just one more thing - and often those are friends. That came through beautifully in this story!
Last, but not least, your writing style is flawless as always! Great work on this!!! :) 10/10 of course!Author's Response: wow. that was probably the most thoughtful critique of my story ever. I'm glad to know that i got it so close. I was writing that as if i was him. As much as possible anyway. I'm very anxious to hear what you think of my other story too since you did such a great job with this one. Thanks. happy reading. Report Review
This one-shot is really nice and that's something since I have read some that are absolutely ghastly(not on this site though).Author's Response: Thanks. There is always a swamp of questionable writing to wade through, but I'm glad you liked this one. Happy reading. Report Review
I absolutely loved this story. It is nice to think that the characters we've come to love will eventually learn to get along and might even find some happiness together. You've done an excellent job of telling this tale. Thank you.
Oh, and by the way, I also really like the "prove you're human" method with the picture and the quiz. First time I've seen it. Original and fun!Author's Response: Thanks. I have a habit of bringing people together in my stories. Happy reading. Report Review
That's nice one shot story. :-) Love how everything goes well in the future with long lost friends.Author's Response: Thanks. happy reading. Report Review
Very nice. A very short, pleasant read. I teared up a few times, too. And of course, I love that the title is a musical theatre reference. I think you should do some more of these little one-shots, but that's just my opinion. --AriAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked it. It really seemed strange writing just one chapter for a change. i suppose i'll get used to it. I've decided to only write the one-shots for a while. i am trying to start writing a sci-fi novel, but it is still in the planning stages so I should have time for a few one-shot chapters. You have opinions? what a surprise! ;) happy reading. Report Review
This was very sweet and very enjoyable to read. Time really has passed and hearing about all those that I love was great. Those that died will always be remembered if we name our kids after them.
George and Pansy spending time together is great! I think Pansy would enjoy family reunions at the Weasley house and meet all of those that she knew before. I think that Harry will treat her nicely.Very nice one-shot. as always, I enjoy reading your stories.
thank you for the privilege.Author's Response: thank you so much. yours is only the second review I have gotten on this story. I was thinking about creating a pairing that is fairly unique using the same charaters all of us already know. That led me to two of my favorites that usually don't get much air time. I didn't exactly make them a pair in this one, but I can think that they will be that later. Hmmm, what to write next? happy reading. Report Review
Wow, what a wonderful story. I didn't want it to end. Great Job. - Now get on with my Epilogue!! lolAuthor's Response: i actually am writing an epilogue, but not to this one-shot. it is for my other story you have read. happy reading. Report Review
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