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Review #1, by Noblevyne Chapter 1

1st November 2009:
I think this is beautiful and poetic - I love the sudden reveal at the end, and the brief glimpse into life in Azkaban for Sirius. His strength and his determination to hold onto his sanity while everyone else is liked a frayed thread, coming apart at the seams, losing everything that made them human. What a struggle it must have been for Sirius to hold onto himself.

I love it!

Author's Response: Your review has totally made my day! I am really glad you liked it and really don't know what to say except thank you for reviewing!

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Review #2, by Pretty Purple Pelican Chapter 1

8th October 2009:
Nice job! I really liked the ending with Sirius Black. One thing that I think is a little bit problematic is that blind people can feel heat, just not see it. The conflict is very nice, though. Perhaps you could've gone into more detail, like who the person was that had asked, or how the clever man (especially since it was Fudge) felt before he was asked to answer the question. It just would've given it that extra edge. Great job, though! :)

Author's Response: Wait, I actually have a review?? Sorry for taking so long to come back to this but I didn't advertise this fic at all, so I'm really surprised that someone reviewed it :P

First your second point: I didn't go that much into detail because this is a response to the 'Every Word Counts' Challenge, which says that the fic must have exactly 500 words but maybe I'll re-write it and add a few more details :)

As for your first point of critique, well to be honest that was just me not really thinking and I'll try and edit that part to make it fit better!

Thank you so much for reviewing!!!

Antje


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