This was so adorably sweet. I think it was the way they talked; they seemed so life-like. Seriously, amazing.
Bravo to you!Author's Response: Aww thanks so much! I'm glad they seemed realistic, and I'm very glad you enjoyed it too :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
You know when you're reading something and one of the characters is exactly like you? Well, that's how Molly is for me. Your characterisation of all three characters was very good, especially Molly, can't you tell, she's already a favourite? Her sarcasm kills me! Then there's Fred with his dramatic responses and James, oh *holds hand on chest* he's so sweet! I love your inclusion of Scorpius, lol, the resident go-to for gossip and he reads Austen...I love him even more!
Seriously, you pulled this off rather well. I'd love to see you tackle hardcore mystery now.
Well done ^_^
LiaAuthor's Response: Hi again, Lia! I'm glad you liked Molly as I rather like her too! I think she'd be fun to know :D I really wanted to write a sweet!James because he's so often portrayed as confident/arrogant/annoying, so I'm glad you liked him too, and Scorpius is probably my favourite! He was so much fun to write. I'd like to do a separate story about him, when I have the time.
Mystery? Oooh, a little too hard for me, I think. I love reading them but I've never tried writing one. I don't think I'd be much good, I'm not very subtle or mysterious xD Maybe one day, though, when I'm in the mood for a challenge...
Thank you so much for all your reviews! I really appreciate it :) Report Review
Merry Christmas, Lizzie! I'm your Secret Santa ;)
My, my, this isn't the average Next Gen, is it? Fred a goody-two-shoes, Molly the devious one, James shy, absolute indifference from everyone toward Scorpius... Definitely not a combo I've seen before!
This was put together really well. I think my favorite part is:
I mean, Mrs Norris the fourth? I’ve never liked the whole concept of naming people after someone else – it shows a serious lack of imagination, don’t you think?”
“Definitely,” I agree, and together we – Molly Weasley (II), Fred Weasley (II) and James Potter (II) –
Brilliant much? Was it on purpose that the three main characters were the II's, or did it just work out that way?
Excellent one-shot, which I as a Next Gen fan shall forever admire. ;)Author's Response: Firstly, THANKS SO MUCH FOR THE REVIEWS! They're all brilliant and have put the most ridiculous grin on my face :D Secondly, a late Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you too :)
I tried to be a bit different with the characterisations mainly because in all my other next-gen stories all the characters are completely cliche - James is arrogant and super confident, Scorpius is sweet and misunderstood... and then I've never actually written about Fred or Molly before, but if I had he would definitely have been a troublemaker and she would have been a bookworm.
Hehe, glad you like that part ;) And actually it was a complete coincidence - it suddenly dawned on me about half way through and I knew I just had to mention it somewhere! I couldn't resist.
Aww you're too sweet! I'm blushing. Well, practically x) Report Review
I love luv LOVE this, :). i adore how none of them followed in their parents footsteps and how they all interact as this family of, well misfits, ;D. it's perfect, seriouslyAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you! It's so lovely to hear that :D I'm fairly certain that none of the kids would actually turn out to be quite so different from their parents, but it was still lots of fun to imagine and then write them this way xD Thanks for the review! Report Review
i must say i really enjoyed your short story i made me chuckle in a few places i will look forward to moreAuthor's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it and that it made you chuckle (I like to think my writing's vaguely amusing, so it's good to know that I'm not completely decieving myself about it xP) Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I think this is really a cute story, and I like that it is really written from a seperate point of view than the character you were given. I really like the character of Molly, and I can really see her as Percy's daughter, so well done. I think this was a great story, and I really enjoyed it :)
~LJAuthor's Response: Thank you! I've been wanting to write Molly for a while and at first I had NO idea how to go about characterising James, so that's why I decided to go from a different POV - glad you liked it :D
Thanks for reviewing, and for making such a great challenge! I really enjoyed doing it :) Report Review
I. LOVE. IT.
I love it, I love it, I love it to bits.
Everything was perfect.
a) MOLLY'S POV - who I do sometimes feel a bit dodgy about reading but she was so good. Almost exactly how I characterise Dominique. She was funny, endearing, and so loveable. One of my all-time favourite Mollys (and there's starting to be quite a few). Her love of trashy romance novels was the bit for me that made me go 'YES - I must read on'.
b) JAMES - If things don't work out with Jasmine, I'll have him. Age gap isn't THAT big. He's so damn cute! I'm not sure I've read him written like this before - so unsure and young and inexperienced. Makes a welcome change.
c) FRED - less to say about him but still a very good character.
d) MALFOY - I laughed out loud. Superb idea for his character. One of my favourites.
It reminded me of a Marauders-era humour, only Molly and Fred would be James and Sirius, and James (II) would probably have been Remus. Nevertheless, it was excellent.
It was brilliant - the pace was perfect, the mystery, the humour. You have a fantastic writing style, you really do. It's really natural and there were so many great lines that I don't think the review could hold them all.
"I've never liked the whole concept of naming people after someone else - it shows a serious lack of imagination, don't you think?" - and the following bit was fantastic.
I loved how they're all ... not polar opposites but pretty different to their parents. Not disappointments but surprises :P
Lizzie, it was FANTASTIC. Really and truly. I love it.
xxAuthor's Response: SQUEE! Thank you, Rachelle! I've had this idea for awhile but then I wrote it in a bit of a hurry to try and meet a challenge deadline (xD) so I wasn't quite sure about how it had turned out, so I'm genuinely relieved :D
a) I love Molly, she's undoubtedly one of my favourite next-gen characters (which I blame you for, as Caught in a Web was the first Molly-centric fic I ever read xD) and I've been meaning to write her for ages, so I'm really glad you liked her :) And one of your favourite Mollys? Wow, thank you! *grins*
b) Hands off! James is MINE! But unfortunately Jasmine beat us both to him :( hehe xD
c) Ahhh, Fred... I really need to expand his character more. He's just kind of... bland. But I'm glad you liked him all the same ;)
d) You won't believe how much it pained me to write Scorpius that way! He's my all-time favourite character and I luurve him to bits, so I don't like to think of him as anything other than lovely, but then I just had a burst of inspiration and I couldn't help but write him like that. So glad you liked it x)
Oooh, I kind of like that comparison to the Marauders! It hadn't occurred to me but I suppose it does make sense. Good thinking there ;) And hehe, I rather liked that line too :D
Thanks so much for this lovely review! You really have made my day :) Report Review
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