You needa update soon. This one has caught my interest. That, and I love French.Author's Response: I apologize for the tardiness. As for now, I'm putting this story on hold since I'm trying to re-write and to write more before posting, so yeah. But hopefully I can update something ASAP.
Thanks for the review :D Report Review
The tension you build in the introduction is admirable, althuogh I am very bothered by some of the mistakes. For example, descendents are those of your bloodline that will be born in the future. I think you meant ancestors when you where writing. Another thing to work on would be sentence structure. You have an interesting story, but I can't enjoy it very well becuase your sentences dont run very smoothly. You also might want to rephrase some passages that come across as slightly forced or akward. I'm not telling all this because I feel like beating up some aspiring author : ) I'm saying all this because I think you have potential, and I want to help you polish the nice material you've started with. I wrote this all on a cellphone, just to let you know. Now that's commitment.Author's Response: I am so so sorry for the tardiness. And thank you for the feedback, I know I need that especially when I realize that I'm still lacking here and there. I will try my best to improve it on future chapters. Thank you! :) Report Review
Oh my gosh, I love this story! Can't wait to see what happens! Update soon please!Author's Response: Actually, I'm not sure when I'll be able to post the next installment as I'll be having a short intern after this. Hopefully I'll manage in between. Anyway, thanks for the review again :) Report Review
You are a good author! I really like this story! Please update soon!!!Author's Response: Yay for first review and thanks! I will try to update as soon as I'm done with my paper for sure :) Report Review
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