I've always loved the pairing of Lucius/Narcissa and all of the potential that goes along with them. I feel there is so much to be created with them, and it's so nice to read stories where people have done just that.

I just reviewed another one-shot by you, and I commented on that one about your wonderful use of imagery, and this story's review bears repeating of that. It was all so beautifully written. It sounded like poetry, and I adore stories like that. They flow so amazingly and are you can just feel the words falling together when you read them.

This was fantastic. :)

Author's Response: i am just the same - i love them, but i find them hard to write, hard to pin down. i had a longer piece about them posted once but i ended up deleting it because they got away from me!

thank you so much for the wonderful review! i am really happy you liked this. i have no idea where it came from!!

xx

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its written like lyrics somehow, aspecial rythm inside

Author's Response: thank you so much. i am pleased you liked it

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There is certainly poetry in your breath dear, or at least from your mind to your fingertips. And I love the sneaky aspect to it, sly dogs they are. ;) Keep up the the great work hun!

Author's Response: thank you once again for another wonderful review! this was another of those little fics that came out of nowhere.

you have made me blush xD
xx

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Beautiful. love it

Author's Response: thank you so much!

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This was really great, Kate!

It took me a few seconds to realize that it was coming from Narcissa's point of view. At least, that's what I drew from it. If it's from Lucius' POV, then I really am as daft as I pretend to be sometimes, lol.

I really liked your diction. You have an interesting, but simple word choice that helps rather than hinders the story. Some authors, myself included, feel that it's necessary to go over the top and beyond with flowery sentences, and while this possessed a great amount of description, it sounded more like facts than the ponderings of a love-drunk girl. That is to say, it sounded like she was describing everything as she saw it, like she believed that her perspective is how everyone viewed him. And while facts can sometimes be boring, this was anything but. It was vibrant. Alive. I could feel the heat of Lucius' skin against my own as if I were Narcissa.

In short, I loved it! Great job!

Regards,
Molly

Author's Response: hey molly!!
please forgive the extreme lateness of this reply - basically, i suck :P
no it is definitely narcissa telling this tale ^_^
this style is kind of new to me - i used to have a penchant for oversaturating with description but i pulled back and tried to concentrate more on the showing and not telling aspect of writing. im glad that it seems to be working!

oooh really? wow that is pretty cool!

thank you hun!!
kate xx

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I liked this story alot.
The way that they already felt for each other, and the way they were going to consummate that love, all the while, their elders planned tehir futures away.

Very good one-shot

Author's Response: thank you for such a nice review, and for totally understanding the story!!

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