This was really good. I have yet to read a story with the Blacks in it. I am hoping you continue soon.Author's Response: I know its been quite a while, but I will certainly update this soon! Never fear. And thank you so much for the kind review, its greatly appreciated ^_^
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i thought that this was certainly a wonderful start to a story. your foundation was marvelous and the setting and plot line seem to fit accurately with your writing style and lyrics. i have read quite a few works from you if i remember write, each having been a true joy, and i believe that this one is certainly no exception at all.
your flow appeared to be flawless in my eyes. at no point did i notice any unguided difference in your pace and i am certain that that is what you wanted to hear. i don't believe flow has ever been a real issue for you but if it has i truly put forth that you don't have to worry about it all now. as i said, i didn't notice anything wrong and although my eyes don't always pick up on everything i am fairly certain that when i say this it is true in every way.
your characterization was off to a great start but as always it will take me a few chapters of looking over your characters to truly be able to give you my honest opinion. so far i don't see any reason why they should ever confused me but we will just have to see how things end up turning out in the end. good luck with development.
overall i thought that this was a marvelous first chapter. you kept me intently interesting in it all from start to finish and this is definitely something that all authors love to hear from their readers. feel free to request again on my thread when you update. i would honestly love to see where you take this and therefore can't wait to see what you come up with next. keep up the beautiful work. have a fabulous day!!Author's Response: Oh confusedlover you always write such splendid reviews! You always know how to make my ego inflate and my cheeks blush :) Thank you yet again for such a wonderful review!! I will most definitely come back to request you, seeing as I have put forth quite a few new stories in the past two days XD
-Sarah Report Review
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