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Wow. This was such an amazing piece of writing. The air of mystery, the way it was divided into little pieces and how you never mentioned the characters was fantastic. My favorite part about all of it was the 'Not dead, but not alive' and 'I didnít love you. I needed you Ė but I could live without you'. It added such depth to the character without even having to describe him/her.
I really enjoyed it - I'm still trying to decide who I think the characters are. Very, very well done!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm actually really glad that you point out your favorite lines (: I love when readers do that because it makes me feel as if what I'm writing actually does have some of the effect that I want it to. I'm glad that you enjoyed it, love (: Thanks again! Report Review
This is, absolutely, my favourite style of fic.
I really enjoyed this - it's a facinating idea. You've allowed room for your reader to imagine (I suppose that was your initial idea for this? :P).
It's a very 'open' story, if you catch my drift. I love the fact that these two characters can be anyone and anything the reader wishes. It's brilliant. I don't think I've read anything much like it - but I do, honestly, adore it.
In a nutshell, think it's the ambiguity of this little peice that I've fallen in love with - so painfully delicious. :D yum.
Very well done. Faaabulous idea!
xAuthor's Response: Of course! What is reading with imagination? Thank you so much for your review! (: Report Review
Very interesting. I think you could expand this into something else entirely, yet at the same time I like it and enjoyed it just the way it is. Just wondering, who did you have in mind when wirting this?
:) BaletGirAuthor's Response:
Thank you! Ah, maybe. I like having things sort of cut off and all, but maybe a short story to define moments I didn't show XD
In my mind, two ships seemed to pop out. Draco/Pansy, Lily/Scorpius. Odd, I know XD Draco/Pansy just seemed to fit for me. I think it sort of fits with canon, too XD (copied from previous response)
Thank you for the review!
This was intriguing. I rather enjoyed it! I loved the whole mystery to it. In a sense it lets the reader imagine both people to be who they choose. It could virtually be anyone since names weren't mentioned. And that's what I love about it! In such a short bit, you get to know the character speaking, though you don't have the foggiest whom it is.
I liked the emotions were good too. Being inside the character speaking as they worked out how they felt and what they remembered was catching.
I do feel the cut off made it slightly choppy, but it didn't take much away from the story. Quite honestly, I don't know how else you could have done it for it to still make proper sense...
If, I may ask, who did you first picture the characters to be?
Lovely job, I simply enjoyed this!
Collette, your reviews are just amazing. Thank you so much! I think that's how it was meant to be - I wanted the readers to think of who it suited them to be.
Emotions. I'm glad you liked them. I'm sort of expirementing with them, recently - trying to convey emotions to the reader as well as I can. Hopefully, I'm succeeding :P
Ah, when I was writing, I wanted it to sort of be cut off, but when I was submitting it, I felt it far too choppy. I had to sort of think about what would be easier to understand, I think XD
In my mind, two ships seemed to pop out. Draco/Pansy, Lily/Scorpius. Odd, I know XD Draco/Pansy just seemed to fit for me. I think it sort of fits with canon, too XD Maybe you could PM me who you believed the ship to be (on TGS), I'd love to read what you think ^_^
Thanks, hon, for another great review ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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