oh my god i love this story! cant wait for more!!

Author's Response: thank you so much! and update will be coming soon :D

-Sarah

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Let me start of by saying wow. For a moment there I thought it was a one-shot and wanted to cry. I had half the mind to beg you to continue because I quite adored how you portrayed Charlie and it would have been a waste if you didn't. Then I scrolled up and saw that it was labeled 'chapter one'. My bad. :(

For a first chapter it has all the makings of a briliant story; a gripping openning, fast-paced danger and action (just what you want in a story that has dragons. come to think of it, every story should have dragons.), and characters you want to know more about.

The only problem I had with it really was trying to keep track of everyone by hair-colour. Not that it is a bad thing, but repeated reference to the characters by their hair confused me at points. I'm sure there are more other appositions that would be more apt? This is just a sugestion of course. It is really just a minor thing and I might be the only one who noticed. I'm a bit weird like that.

anyways, great story! I enjoyed reading this and am anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

-melpomene

Author's Response: You make an incredible point! I can see how hair color would make it confusing!! Thank you for pointing that out, I'll be sure to edit that up and fix it :D Otherwise, thank you so much for the kind review and I'm happy you like the pace, and characters!! You leave wonderful reviews and no this isn't a one shot :P it is a short short story though XD Stay tuned :P Updates on everything soon!

-Sarah

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