i wonder who he gets distracted by...it's surely a whom right.
o maybe it's tia.
aw that would be awesome.
update soon!Author's Response: Thanks for leaving a review! I'll try my best to update soon!! :D Report Review
I can't wait to read more of this story! The beginning is very good. Please update soon! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm so glad you've enjoyed it so far! Report Review
Jill! Jill! Jill! *pokes more rapidly*
You updated! I'm cheering for Ghana as I write this review! Hope you're watching? You are the epitome of knowledge for all things World Cup. I feel like I need a Jill radar to know what's going on in the competition. But all of that aside, what can I say about this awesome chapter? Oh, a lot? Should I start then? ^_^
I love Tia. Her wit & rhetoric are refreshing to read! Even when she is not speaking, her brain is going at a million miles an hour! I think that might get her into trouble later! ^_^ I think her dynamic with her friends is really interesting; it reflects the honesty we have with our friends in relationships. Sometimes, we want to shoot them. Sometimes, we want to hug them. But they are always firmly there in our minds, and considering their reactions can both amuse, infuriate, and entertain us! I think, too often if fanfiction, friends are always supportive of the main character; that, or they are like - so totally mean! ^_^ Friendship is much more complicated than that, and it really comes through in your writing.
Why are boys so stupid? If evolution is the "great, unifying theme of biology", then that is definitely the "great, unifying theme" of life in general. In my humble opinion ^_^. They can be so amazing, and then, a moment later - beyond infuriating! As a girl nerd who has been paired with too many boys for projects, I understand Tia's angst. They are never as terrible as you think they are. They'll be awful in class, and then out of class, they're magically much better (no pun intended). Which leaves you being like - "What is your problem in class!" - to which, they shrug. *sigh*
I love the storytelling voice in which you write. I suppose it's not so much a voice as a style - you avoid author voice, but everything just flows together like a "once upon a time" tale. I fear I'm not making any sense, but what I'm trying to say is that you're amazing!
And kudos to Tia for not telling Wood what she smells. Sheesh, that's an intensely personal question!
Favorite quotes time!
I'll never figure out these infernal boys' minds.
But clearly my pointed actions have as much effect as my prayers do. A.K.A. none.
"Still a half-blood, sir."
^_^ Thank you for writing this lovely story! I cannot wait to see how the Tia/Oliver dynamic evolves. You are so good at comedy, authentic comedy, not in the *nudge nudge* cheap way. I'll miss you over the next month (I hate that we've been missing each other!) Have a wonderful summer, and I hope to talk to you soon! *hugs* xoxoAuthor's Response: SARAHH! I can't say I cheered for Ghana... though Spain has made it to the finals!! I'm so pumped!!! I really hope you get a chance to watch it while in England :D
It's so funny how you point out the exact thing that I'm aiming for with a character. Like seriously, I think we have a mental connection or something, it's epic! I always try to portray the reality of a situation through my own experiences or those that are retold to me by others.
You know, it's so much easier for me to be the character... to completely embody them as I write. Not only does it make it more interesting (in my opinion), but I'm pleased that you also think it sounds better :D However, it also makes it much more difficult to write - thus why I hardly ever update. And you always make sense to me :D
RIGHT?! It's definitely going to come up later on. I really need to get to work on this! I'm so excited to get to the later chapters, but it's so hard /whine.
Thanks for reviewing!! I love that you love this story :D I am missing you! But I'm totally stalking to you via blog :P (in the living vicariously through you way, because I totally wish I was in England!) and I hope you're having a super spectacular time and I can't wait to hear all your stories when you get back!! Report Review
"I'll never figure out these infernal boys' minds." True that!
I'm not quite sure what is worse- being partnered with your crush or not being partnered with your crush. I think that, if you have a crush, life will be generally infuriating and humiliating no matter what you do. :)
One of my favorite things about this chapter is the interactions that occur between Tia and her friends; the way you write Tia's familiarity with Alicia, Angelina, and Katie puts the reader at ease within the story. And of course I love dear Oliver as well- half prat, half gentleman. ^_^ You write him wonderfully.
Another favorite thing about the chapter is the way that your inner-HP-fan shines through. *nods fervently* The details you include about potions and the way you mention how Tia has a HBP-ish ability to alter potions with dexterity really puts the reader inside Hogwarts and embellishes your OC with realism. Also, the way that you don't shy away from any of the details really gives the reader a sense of being able to see inside Snape's Dungeon.
I was slightly worried about the Oliver and Tia work session when I initially read it would occur, but I think you handled it wonderfully. No cliche-ness, and interestingly Oliver loses a bit of his facade-cockiness. :) Good stuff, that: it makes Oliver human.
I must admit, from a girl irl POV, it's very difficult to believe that guys think as much about their crushes as we do ours. ^_^ Mwwwhahahaha.
Kudos for an awesome chapter! ^_^ Update soon, I need more Tia/Oliver laughs! Cheers-
HallowsAuthor's Response: Laura! hahaha thank you times ten billion for such a lovely review :D I'm so pleased you like all of their interactions... I tried to base it off personal experience - how people react in these situations. I find it odd that some authors don't because if you take from experience, there are so many things that happen all the time that I personally can't help but use.
I don't know how to reply to the detail compliment. I'm seriously so touched. I find detail so integral to the piece; it's so important for the audience to understand exactly how the character is seeing the situation whether it be physicall, emotionally, or both. That's it, I have no other words :)
Hahaha, no! I try and avoid all cliches, but only by a small amount - you know, just to prove it can be done :P I knew, going into this, that there would be so many cliches, but the trick is to convince the audience that it's essential, that even though this happens often, the characters can still retain themselves in the situation. :)
Thanks so much again for the fantastic review, I'll try my darndest to get another chappie out soon :) Report Review
I enjoyed reading this. I've never read an Oliver/OC before so its good. It's not really that humorous so it may just be an "author" thing. I have that too, don't worry. The grammar was good. I like how she's falling for him right now too. One thing I noticed is that you did not mention the narrator's name once in the whole chapter. Unless I just overlooked it. So you may need to consider Oliver saying her name at least once while addressing her or something. That's all. Great job!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it! It's a ship that I was sick of seeing the romantic interest being part of the Quidditch team as well, so I took matters into my own hands ;]
And he said her last name, I thought that'd suffice, but I'll see if I can edit in her name somewhere.
Thanks again! :D Report Review
First, this chapter made me sputter water all over my screen. And since I'm out of cleaner so I must now see through the streaks to tell you how much I loved this chapter :) And I cannot BELIEVE you dedicated this to me - you are much, much too kind! And you do SO much for me and Safe and I cannot TELL you how much I enjoy knowing you and sqeeuing over writing and graphics and life together :)
I adore your main character because she is SO realistic. That paradoxical fear of being partnered with the boy you like, and then not knowing what he's thinking: totally terrifying! I love it how the tension between them is not cliche in the slightest- it makes Hogwarts and the learning environment so much more real. And I love how you portray Oliver- this nonchalance coupled with being slightly perplexed- and a gentleman without meaning to be :) I cannot WAIT to learn more about him.
"We all huff and puff murderously" - bahaha been there, done that :) "I mentally slap myself. Of course I know he's in the class." Seeing that feeling written down made me cackle like a fiend. I'm having an out of body experience right now.
I LOVE this chapter and I cannot WAIT for more of the story. You are ever so amazing, Jill :) I love seeing the Hogwarts realism at its finest.
* hugs and sneaks off to read GAL* xoxoAuthor's Response: HAHAHA Ohh Sarah, how you make me laugh! I loved your departing line.
But I'm glad you liked this! It would be really bad if I dedicated it to you and you didn't... hahaha :D
I'm actually so pleased that you like it... as we've talked about I've tried to be a bit different with my stories, heh, and by basing this in the classroom instead of the Quidditch Pitch I'm hoping to bring something new to the Oliver/OC ship. I'm really so glad that this first chapter went over well - it's quite critical :)
Heh, look for the next chapter soonish - it's already written :P
*hugs* :D Report Review
:) Oliver forever! :)
And the brilliant beta writes a beautiful chapter, full of comedic awesomeness. FAVORITE LINES:
..."We all huff and puff murderously, but to no avail."
We all know what that's like. Freaking awesome WC.
..."No. Just swallowed air the wrong way."
Love it. It's something I would say to a crush and then mercilessly, mentally flwack myself for. :D
Cheers-Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D Haha, I'm not sure what it is, but the main character just had to have that humorous aspect to her character; there was just no other way to do it! I'm definitely glad you can relate, that's what I was going for. The stories a bit different from the Oliver stuff I've read (which I obv. did on purpose ;] haha) and I'm glad that someone besides me connects with her!
Thanks for reviewing hun :D Report Review
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