OMG I loved it. Tolley was amazing. You should definetly make a sequal. Report Review
Love it! Really really fantastic!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
this story is so cheeky, i love itAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
that was nice and funny...the end part is kinda cuteAuthor's Response: Thank you so much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
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hahaha that was truelt amazingAuthor's Response: Thanks! Haha. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
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Go stick your book in a faceAuthor's Response: Ha. You're funny, Hallyn. Report Review
This is cute :) I really enjoyed it. I have a couple characterization issues - like how Hermione would probably not have a stuffed dog - I don't see her as much of a girly girl, but I suppose that's subjective.
There was something else too... Oh, her giggling. But, that too is subjective.
It was a really cute one shot, that I really enjoyed. Draco was done quite well, considering the whole ship is improbable. It's okay though, I love Dramione!
-LilyAuthor's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism. I might change because what you said makes sense but I want to wait for my other story to be validated completely before I update this one. So thanks again.
omg i love the ending.. Author's Response: Haha. Yeah it's cute. Report Review
this is a REALLY good draco/hermione one-shot because its hard to explain how they dont like eachother and then thye fall in love in a short kind of way.
i loved the ending. it made me laugh but im just glad they got together in the first place. great work. keep it up!!
xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! It didn't take me long to write so I thought it might be a little messy but this shows that it might not be too rough after all. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
the ending made me laugh like crazy!Author's Response: haha i'm glad i made you laugh. Report Review
It wasn't the best written but I loved the plot. I loved the last line. That was the best. You should try to condense your sentences a little more so that it doesn't seem quite so choppy. The whole paragraph with hermione and draco kissing was choppy but if you combine sentences and try to explain a little more of what happened it would sound perfect.
I loved the plot though. It was superb. Keep writing and improving your writing.
10/10Author's Response: thanks for the advice. I'll be sure to remember that when i'm writing. Report Review
hahaha, simple yet very good two thumbs up
10/10Author's Response: I do enjoy simple stories. Sometimes the complex ones make my head hurt and I think, 'How can the author keep all of this straight?' But i do appreciate the two thumbs upness. Thanks for the review. Report Review
Definitely enjoyable and very cute, but more characterization could have been conveyed. The large paragraphs also seem a bit disorganized, so maybe editing more or having the fic beta'ed beforehand would have been better. That being said, I thought this was adorable and the unexpectedness of the situation really came through.Author's Response: Disorganization was inevitable i think on this piece because i wrote it straight out of my head. I was bored one day and wrote it with no plan on where it was going or how it was going to turn out. But I'm glad you caught that and maybe I'll consider doing some revisions. Report Review
I love it! It was well written, and soo adorable. Great Job!Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
That was a really cute story. A few grammar/spelling errors, but not too many. Very nice. I really liked Hermione's reaction after the kiss. Keep up the good work! 8/10 ~JenAuthor's Response: Thanks :) I really enjoyed writing it. And I'll look and see what mistakes your talking about. Thanks for reading. Report Review
hahahahahahahaha i liked tht tht was prtty cool. i luv teh endin. jus one suggestion. make draco just a litle more how do i say it i mean like arrgg! the words not coming to mind. forget it. it was good. im so frustrated right now argghh!Author's Response: hahaha. i'll see what i can do to make him more "arrgg" lol. thanks for the feeback. appreciate it. -Shelby Report Review
cute - i like your story.Author's Response: Thank you. I worked hard on it. Report Review
Loved the one-shot.
The characterizations are okay.
Haha, the last line is awesome.
Sorry this isn't much of a review.
This is going into my favorites.
Peace, love, and candy,
MichelleAuthor's Response: Thanks. :) I know I have to work on my characterizations. Thats my weakness. And I'm glad you loved it. Thanks, Michelle. Report Review
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