This is a brilliantly written piece of writing. It is certainly original; I've never heard of this idea before. The grammar was almost perfect besides two things I noticed;

- "You won't be able to go near any human for probity a few years. Which means you probity won't see Hermione close up and if you do we'll probity have to pin you down and keep her at a distance." - "probity" should be "probably"

- In the authors note, "monthes" should be "months"

Besides this, this is a good story. If they were vampires, I think you have got how the Weasleys would act spot on; not drinking human blood if they can help it, the twins' jokes and Ginny's love for Harry.

So overall, a good and unique one-shot; I'm impressed. However there is one thing I want to clear up;

- Near the end, after Harry's woken up as a vampire, Ron says "Yea that's how I felt when I woke up." Does that mean Ron wasn't born as a vampire, and was turned into one to? Therefore this must mean he is either not part of the Weasley family, or they were all turned into vampires, surely? Also I presume the Weasleys can be around humans now as they've grown used to not drinking their blood.

In conclusion, I'm not a big Twilight fan (in fact, I hate it, sorry LOL) and I'm not very keen on mixing it with Harry Potter, but this story does it very well; if it has to be done, then this is how it should be done. Great work!

P.S You got Harry's reaction, both in not believing Ginny was a vampire at first, and not running away, spot on; well done!

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"TWILIGHT! TWILIGHT! TWILIGHT!" Ew, don't take this the wrong way, I had to bite my hand to keep from laughing! Since I think it's really a stupid story, especially for something to do anything with Harry Potter, I'm gonna concentrate on the writer. I didn't find any misstates (but maybe that was because I was eating my fist), and than again, I don't look. I made sense all the way through, and was easy to follow, and I thought it was so cute at the beginning.
But again, Harry Potter and Twilight/vampires should not be mixed!

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Perfect match between Twilight and Harry Potter without using SM characters :) brilliant job! :D

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interesting. but on the not like harry potter at all

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Nice and thanks for writing.

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It needs a sequel. Other than that, it's good.

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I vote to ahead and carry on with the story. Did they tell Harry about having children? Does Hermione decide to turn? Angelina? Fleur? Lots of directions to go.

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wow. harry's a vampire. cool.

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