This is a brilliantly written piece of writing. It is certainly original; I've never heard of this idea before. The grammar was almost perfect besides two things I noticed;
- "You won't be able to go near any human for probity a few years. Which means you probity won't see Hermione close up and if you do we'll probity have to pin you down and keep her at a distance." - "probity" should be "probably"
- In the authors note, "monthes" should be "months"
Besides this, this is a good story. If they were vampires, I think you have got how the Weasleys would act spot on; not drinking human blood if they can help it, the twins' jokes and Ginny's love for Harry.
So overall, a good and unique one-shot; I'm impressed. However there is one thing I want to clear up;
- Near the end, after Harry's woken up as a vampire, Ron says "Yea that's how I felt when I woke up." Does that mean Ron wasn't born as a vampire, and was turned into one to? Therefore this must mean he is either not part of the Weasley family, or they were all turned into vampires, surely? Also I presume the Weasleys can be around humans now as they've grown used to not drinking their blood.
In conclusion, I'm not a big Twilight fan (in fact, I hate it, sorry LOL) and I'm not very keen on mixing it with Harry Potter, but this story does it very well; if it has to be done, then this is how it should be done. Great work!
P.S You got Harry's reaction, both in not believing Ginny was a vampire at first, and not running away, spot on; well done! Report Review
"TWILIGHT! TWILIGHT! TWILIGHT!" Ew, don't take this the wrong way, I had to bite my hand to keep from laughing! Since I think it's really a stupid story, especially for something to do anything with Harry Potter, I'm gonna concentrate on the writer. I didn't find any misstates (but maybe that was because I was eating my fist), and than again, I don't look. I made sense all the way through, and was easy to follow, and I thought it was so cute at the beginning.
But again, Harry Potter and Twilight/vampires should not be mixed! Report Review
Perfect match between Twilight and Harry Potter without using SM characters :) brilliant job! :D Report Review
interesting. but on the not like harry potter at all Report Review
Nice and thanks for writing. Report Review
It needs a sequel. Other than that, it's good. Report Review
I vote to ahead and carry on with the story. Did they tell Harry about having children? Does Hermione decide to turn? Angelina? Fleur? Lots of directions to go. Report Review
wow. harry's a vampire. cool. Report Review
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