A pretty serious issue. Poor Romilda. :(
There should be a follow up...or you should at least write another story about her. Maybe? :)Author's Response: I knew I wanted to do a serious story for the quote I was given and I wanted to do Romilda. I actually do have 2 more stories with her in my short story collection. They both also present her as someone with mental troubles. I don't know why I have this image of her as a stalker, but that's how she almost always comes out when I write her.
So, I do have other stories about her, but they're very similar. Report Review
i have made it my goal to read all ur stories sometime in the next 2 days.
i absolutely adore ur style of writing!!
~AnnieAuthor's Response: Wow, I'm surprised you liked this story because it's a dark, depressing view of a troubled woman.
If you do read all my stories, I'm sure you'll notice that I tend to be dark, but not always. Thank you so much for the reads and reviews. I appreciate the compliments and time you spent reading. Report Review
Definitely a great little one-shot. I wanted to sign up for the same challenge but I've got too much on my plate, but you did a great job!
:DaniAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review and I appreciate the kind words. I probably shouldn't have signed up for the challenge, but I couldn't pass up a Daria challenge. Report Review
A daria quote challenge! Why was I not informed?
Hah. I am staring at the screen thinking: what can i possibly say that will sound cool. But I obviously cant think of anything.
Anyway. I always imagined Romilda as pretty cheap. But a loose woman is usually the result of, you know, emotional problems and all that. And your story addresses this. It's plain to see that having wanton flings with just anybody is a desperate attempt at feeling needed.
But it's funny (funny = ironic) that in Romilda's haste to ascertain happiness, she ended up depriving herself of the very thing she actually wanted.
But it's all the worse because Romilda places her neediness, low self-esteem, and chronic deviancy on a pedestal. Which serves only to elevate her situation to even higher states of patheticness. It's like a self-fulfilling prophecy almost, and the prophecy is that her life is worthless.
I can kind of relate actually. I mean, from a purely ritualistic sense, in that there are times when I too feel that if I just achieved one more thing, life would be so much the better. In Romilda's case, it was adding notches to her bedpost. But by obsessively and unrealistically striving for perfection, she only end up making her life worse. She lost out.
I liked the flashback episode. "She closed her eyes and a tear came", because sometimes one word or one person's memory can evoke so much reaction.Author's Response: The Daria quote challenge is up until November 20, so you have plenty of time to get an entry in. :)
I really wanted to show a portrait of a troubled person who had fallen into something that she didn't know how to get out of.
Yes, she feels her life isn't worth anything without Michael (or possibly, Harry) so she goes about self-fulfilling it without realizing it.
Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate it very much. Report Review
This was awesome, I love how deeply you developed the character, it's like a snapshot of Romilda's life.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you for the review. It's a little character portrait of a person who's obviously having problems and is dealing with them in a self-destructive way. Report Review
Hey hey! Thanks for completing the challenge. As for what you said about the darkness of the story, I love it. Its really interesting to see where others minds go when presented with a certain set of words!
I really loved the idea, I have a big weakness for less explored minor characters because they have so much potential and you certainly used what we know of Romilda very well. One thing I could suggest though is to avoid starting sentences with ‘she *follows with action*’ and as annoying and pretentious (in an ‘I’m an annoying English teacher and my word is gospel' way) as it sounds always try to show not tell.
I also love the final sentence “She checked her makeup one last time and left. The figure in the mirror followed her.”. It was really powerful and tragic, which I assume was your goal.
Anyway, thanks for completing my challenge it was a great read and do keep on writing!
ClareAuthor's Response: Hmm, I thought I did a pretty good job showing and not telling. I could see what you mean about the she 'blank' format. I did it a lot and it's a bit repetitive, and redundant.
I'm glad you liked the darkness and the use of a minor character. As much as I love Daria, it was a lot of fun to do this challenge.
Thanks for the challenge and the nice review. Report Review
A new story! Heehee! It looked intriguing, so naturally, I had to read it right away. I have to admit, I'm not sure what Daria is, and I'm not clear on what quote you had to include, but I liked the story anyway.
Ok, so I admit my eyebrows probably met the back of my neck when I read about Romilda's little black book. I'd never really considered it possible to be THAT promiscuous. I suppose it's possible, but wow. You've got to work really hard at it to make it happen, I would think. I can totally see why Michael "needed time." If I'd been in his shoes, I'd have been shocked and probably making a little comment about therapy after having decided another date was out of the question.
This story was rather sad, in a way. Romilda was so pitiful. She obviously has big problems if she hasn't managed to get over the fact that she never got a date with the amazing Harry Potter. What's even sadder is that she knows her behavior is unhealthy, but she chooses to continue. It's sad, but it's realistic. I like that you were so honest with the ending of this piece. Rather than ending on a false hopeful note of how everything would be happy and wonderful from now on, you ended in a more real (and more powerful) way.Author's Response: Daria was an animated show on MTV a few years back about a very bright and sarcastic teen girl and her best friend. It was full of snarky humour and it was a great show. The quote I had to use was "I like having low self-esteem, it makes me feel special." Originally, it was a humourous quote, but I took it somewhere different.
There really are people like this who deaden the pain by doing things like that. I'm glad you liked the ending. Stopping an addiction is hard and I didn't want a 'sunshine and flowers' ending, because it's not realistic.
I meant for Romilda to be pitiable. She's a broken woman who has problems beyond her old unrequited love for Harry and missing Michael.
Thanks so much for the review of this. If you keep reviewing 'Oddments,' you can expect to see Romilda again. Report Review
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