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Review #1, by Seph_Beck Summer at the Burrow

16th September 2009:
"Hearing Ron talk about Hermione like that made him even more uncomfortable. After so many years of closeness with his friends it was disconcerting they now shared something in which he had no part." I like where you're heading with this.

Good emotional description. Very little dialogue and action. Try to "spruce up" the next one.

"Spruce up." Yeah... I know I'm an old fart.

Author's Response: Thaks for the review.

I understand what you mean. I admit my writing does tend to be a bit "description heavy" but you must remember this is only the first chapter. Future installments will have plenty of action and dialogue, or at least I hope so.

Thanks again


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Review #2, by king_griz06 Summer at the Burrow

14th September 2009:
This is a good start! How often will you be updating? Look forward to reading more of this story.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review!

I plan to update every one or two weeks, other commitments permitting


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