Wow another so quickly! I enjoyed it just as much, it's so brilliant! Much love xx Report Review
I'm so impressed with this story! From the first chapter until now it has 100% held my attention and the writing was wonderful as well. I enjoyed the pacing of it and can't wait to see it continue :) So good, honestly, a new favorite! Report Review
hope you plan to continue it!1 Report Review
This is a really interesting beginning. I have to say the title drew me in.
The list of names was a bit confusing? I think you may need to explain them a bit more and limit them to the characters that are mentioned in the chapter. I also think the chapter was a little short considering the names and the definitions at the beginning.
You might think of doing the definitions of fate, destiny, and kismet at the beginning of different chapters. Like a new word that ties in for every chapter. That would be a neat idea.
Otherwise, I really enjoyed the story. I was skeptical at first because I usually don't enjoy fanfics that start when the characters are young unless they're really well written and yours are.
Congratulations, I'll be waiting for you're next chapter update!
BrittishAuthor's Response: Thanks for the great review! I took your advice and changed the chapter :) And don't worry, they'll only be young in the first two chapters! Read the new one and tell me what you think! Report Review
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