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Review #1, by WeasleyTwins and in a kingdom of flowers...

7th September 2009:
Hello Kalina! -glomp-

HOLY CRAP, WHAT IN THE WORLD! Ahhh! What am I supposed to say to that, exactly? How amazing it is? How is makes my heart palpitate in my chest? This was absolutely ridiculous! [in the best possible way, of course] I don't even know how to say what I want to say, so if I make no sense, do understand. This piece was like the sweet taste of a fresh watermelon. It was like the pang of delight when you see a smile that lights up your world. I wanted to giggle at your characterization of Sirius and sigh at the Lily beneath the umbrella. They're these two people in the rain, the rain like a forbidden and encouraging hand pushing them forward.

I am totally and utterly in love with this. So convincing, so detailed. The imagery and the diction and the characterization and dialogue...they just...this has made my week. Perhaps I've never told you, but description about the rain, the sun, anything remotely tied into nature just makes me want to curl up beneath an oak tree and look through its branches at the stars. And let me tell you, that particular scene is something that makes me truly happy, and this piece has done just that. I don't know if that is plausible, but this is one of those very, very rare instances in which a story makes me happy.

Absolutely and completely love it, 10/10

Shelby

P.S. Favorited!

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Review #2, by The Empress and in a kingdom of flowers...

6th September 2009:
Have I ever told you I friggin' love your stories? I do, a lot. SFM! :D

Anyway, this is just more of your amazingness come to life. The imagery with the crocuses and the personification of the rain brings this to life. It's beautiful Kalina! I adore it. :) I really do.

This is one of the best Sirily fics I've read. I love the metaphor, with the umbrella, protecting her from things she loves, and wants to love. Keeping her in a safe place that is dry and safe, but the flowers don't bloom there. I LOVE the imagery. It's amazing. Absolutely brilliant. And the description, it's lovely.

This whole piece is just beautiful. And brilliant, as alway.

*squishes*
~Shiloh

Author's Response: *hugs* I love you, Shiloh! SFM! :D

I'm happy you liked the images of crocuses (some of my favorite flowers) and the umbrella. And I love the rain, too, so I could understand why Sirius scorned the fact that Lily protected herself from it. :)

Really? *dies* You flatter me too much. And the umbrella - gah, I hate those things. Drench me, please! Rather than stay nice and dry.

Thank you so much for this lovely review, Shiloh. ILY. *squishes back*

XOXO, Kalina


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Review #3, by xxxemoprincessxxx and in a kingdom of flowers...

5th September 2009:
aww! this is really good!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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Review #4, by civilized and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
I've always been a pretty adamant James/Lily shipper, but this... it's beautiful. Writers like me can only dream of such elegant words.

It's this kind of story that goes along with soft, tinkling pianos and silent tears. It's hard to imagine Sirius being so (mind the pun) serious, but you manage it with grace. I'm absolutely in love with it!

You're great. :]

Author's Response: Hehe, a lot of people have told me that they prefer James/Lily to Sirius/Lily. I rather like both, to be honest. Writers like you? Oh, my dear, I'm sure you write splendidly!

Soft tinkling pianos and silent tears. What a lovely metaphor, I'm enchanted. ^^ Thank you so much for this review, hon, it means a great deal. *hugs*
XOXO, Kalina


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Review #5, by Violet Gryfindor and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
Hmmm... Sirius/Lily, now this is interesting to see. :D I was surprised to see another new story from you - I didn't know whether to laugh or shake my head and roll my eyes. You'll have more stories than Gubby at this rate. ;) Not that it's a bad thing - the one-shot length suits you well.

I'm still wrapping my head around the premise of this story. It appears very simple on the outside - about two people meeting in the rain - yet once you get into the story, it's very complex. There's a history between them that you allude to, yet you don't need to say more - that would make things too dramatic and take away from this particular moment.

Ah, the ending! It's so romantic, so unlike Sirius/Lily stories I've read, which usually have some sort of impending doom or breakup attached to them. Here, you've given them a happy ending, and that last line is so sweet - I love how you tie the rain and the flowers into it. I can never remember the literary term for nature being sympathetic to the events of a story (grade twelve English has apparently exited my memory), but the way you've used it here produces a satisfying effect on the reader. I feel happier just having read this story. XD

Now for the critque. The language requires a Mature rating, as you did use the f-word a couple of times - either you remove those or up the rating, your choice. I would suggest the latter since its use suits your characterization of Sirius - he's trying to be the tough guy, though with the language he uses, he's really a Romantic at heart (probably carries a volume of Keats in his pocket :P). And he's angry at that part of the story - frustrated by his love for Lily, James's infidelities, and her resulting sadness.

And the line Perhaps it had been some whim of James sounds awkward. It seems more like a line translated from another language than proper English. I was going to tell you to put James in the possessive, but the use of "of" does that, I think.

Anyway, this is another great story from you! It's wonderful to see how many different ships and situations you're experimenting with. :D

Author's Response: You know, I didn't even finish reading the review the first time. As soon as you said it required a Mature rating, off I went like a shot, changed the rating, and came back. Whew. Close one. :P I thought it would've been fine, but at least now I'm safe. Thank you, Susan. ^_^

Shake your head and roll your eyes, by all means! I like one-shots, they're fun to write and I try to use different circumstances every time. Actually, I was doing a word race with Molly and I was listening to Umbrella by Rihanna and feeling sad-ish and romantic (:P), so this came out of that. Make of it what you will. XD

There is a history between them - mainly because I feel like Lily would fall more for Sirius (or my interpretation of Sirius) than she would fall for James. You're right about that line, by the way. XD I must've been thinking in French. You know, language of love and all that jazz.

I wanted to give them a happy ending. It felt mean not to. Often, I find, Sirius/Lily stories are packed so full of angst. I didn't want that, this time, so hey. Why not a kiss in the rain and some crocuses to go along with it. I'm happy it left you feeling happy. ^_^

Thank you so much for this review, Susan. *hugs* It's always great to hear from you and your opinion means, as you know, a whole big deal of a lot to me. :)

XOXO, Kalina


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Review #6, by ravenna_gardens and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
Aww, beautiful. I love the umbrella imagery. Very sweet, a nice, quick one-shot!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

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Review #7, by EffyFoSho and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
Oh, it's actually so beautiful :]
I've never really liked Sirius/Lily but I absolutely adored this fic. You have amazing writing skills! And the ending was so perfect and a brilliant way to keep the whole umbrella thing going. (Which, by the way, was completely original)
10/10 xx

Author's Response: Hey there! Wow, beautiful. *blush* Thank you! And as I said while answering another review, I think it was timeturner's "Reckless" that converted me. You should read it - it's absolutely enthralling. Thank you so much for this lovely review and I'm happy you liked the umbrella theme!

XOXO, Kalina


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Review #8, by DarkLadyofSlytherin and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
Awe I adore it! It's so sweet, and yet, so dark and gloomy. I love Sirius, you know, and when I see him so pissy (as he is) I just want to give him a big hug and tell him that in the end our dear Lily will see the error of her ways and go to him. Yup, it's amazing, and I love it. Which is not surprising since I love just about everything else you write. It felt oddly poetic at times and it made me love it all the more.

Author's Response: Aw, Len! *huggles* I adore Sirius, too, because he's got so much more to offer than, in my opinion, any of the other Marauders, except, of course, Peter. Haha, I'm sure he appreciates your hug, though he might be gruff about it. ;) Thank you so much for this lovely review, Len. You know how much your opinion means to me. XOXO, Kalina

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Review #9, by SnitchSnatcher and in a kingdom of flowers...

4th September 2009:
Holy crap on a stick, I wish I could write something so beautiful in the span of 40 minutes! Once again, you blew me out of the water. This was. . .well, it was stunning. Normally I'm not the biggest fan of Sirius/Lily fics, but this. Wow. That's really all I can say. Despite its length, you gave their relationship depth instead of just being all 'Oh, I'm going to pair Sirius and Lily together for the sake of it'. So major kudos for that!!

I loved the style of this - the short sentences. And your description! My God, if only I were capable of writing so flawlessly. There a certain charm to your writing that I can't put my finger on, but regardless of the piece I'm reading, it draws me in. You have a way with words, my friend, and for that I'm truly envious.

10/10 since I don't know how to make the infinity sign on my keyboard and I just pressed the zero randomly, lol.

Great job, Kalina! You never cease to amaze me! :)

Author's Response: Molly, you know perfectly well you can. You blow ME out of the water with your wonderful humor, I wish I could write it as well as you. Me, I write so much angst you must think I live a horrible, horrible life. You know, I used to hate it very much, now I adore it. I read timeturner's "Reckless" a while ago, and it absolutely converted me.

The short sentences I felt fit Sirius better than long flowy things like "My mind was a turmoil of ephemeral thoughts going over the waterfall of my emotions" (Yes, O_o indeed). *blush* Thank you so much, Molly. And I haven't the faintest idea how to do infinity either, and even if I did, I wouldn't tell you, because I most certainly do not deserve it.

Thank you so much, darling. *hugs*
XOXO, Kalina


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