Darn... i wrote a long review and the page refreshed! But I loved this enough to summarise :)
Firstly - thankyou for your lovely review response. It made my day to learn that 'someone like you' enjoyed Ripples *squeals like the teen she is not*.
Secondly - I don't know how it took me so long to read any of your work, but its good. Very good.
To the actual review - this was just so original. It was slightly difficult - no one wants to let go of the idealisation of Arthur - but you pulled it off. Absolutely brilliant was the twist; I was convinced to the end it was Bellatrix, particularly with lines like
"two women: one blonde, one brunette, whispering fiercely. It is about flowers. It is about betrayal. It is about her, that sleek, black-haired beauty that you gave up so long ago"
I was happily formulating theories that this was why Molly killed Bellatrix. !!
Your work is just so conceptually profound as well as well written it is humbling!
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this was so stunning, Kalina! incredible! i can't think of what to say - this has left me floored, stunned, totally mesmerised.
i have never ever viewed arthur this way - i mean, who would think it - but my goodness you wrote him magnificently! you made it work and not once did i question your words or your command over your character. and you left me guessing until the end - i could not work out who the other woman was - you threw a red-herring with the kissing scene and the lestrange boy ^_- and also created such terrible double-meaning with that scene, once i discovered who she was.
i honestly don't know what to say. this piece will stay with me for a long time - i have never read anything like it and i will not forget it.
you know i love you and your wonderful mind! this was a brilliant example of how powerful your imagination is. ILY!!
thank you for writing something so different.
Kate xx Report Review
Hello Kalina! I'm here to TGS's Frantic Frenzy!
HOLY CRAP. HOLY CRAP. Like seriously, you're absolutely crazy, you know that? Totally insane. Only you could write something so poetic, so brilliant. It was pure poetry, pure sin, pure beauty. The description was rich, the characterization was utter brilliance. I must know, what inspired you to write this?
So, at first I have to admit that I was very wary that Arthur was cheating on Molly, but you know, I like it. Let me rephrase that. I like the idea that Arthur is committing a sin - the perfect Arthur Weasley, perfect in our eyes. Yet, he's terrible, he's committing the worst of sin. I don't know. I just found it so amazing. At first, I totally thought Alice was Bellatrix. Stupid of me, maybe a ploy of yours, but until the end, I thought it was Bellatrix.
Overall, I just loved this. Second person is fast becoming my favorite POV and your writing strengthened my resolve, for sure. I don't say this often, if ever, but you are one of the best writers on this site. Your potential far exceeds the stars, but reaches into the far universes.
Shelby Report Review
beautiful story, absolutely magnificent. loved every bit of it.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so happy you liked it. :) Report Review
You have such a poetic form of writing that I adore, I loved your descriptions that entranced me in how beautifully they explained everything.
I hadn't realised you were talking of Alice, I had thought of someone else. And the hint of Lolita in there gave it a more 3D image of Arthur that I love.Author's Response: Oh my goodness. Thank you so much! Poetic? Ha, I don't personally think so, but thank you so much. *hugs* And yeah, I wanted to give it a little twist at the end, seeing as I'd always wanted to write this (Molly/)Arthur/Alice/Rabastan fic. And Lolita is one of the best novels I've ever read.
Thank you so much for this review! XOXO, Kalina Report Review
OMG! I'm stunned, really. I am sitting here now staring at my computer screen wonder what I can say about a fic such as this that would do is justice? I doubt there are words that I could write that would make up for the way I'm suddenly shocked, yet completely and utterly love the way this fic is written.
Second person was definitely the way to go with this fic. I can't imagine reading it in any other Point of View. I would never imagine you to have never written second person. It flowed so well that one would think you a pro in writing in this point of view.
Though, I do have one thing to make a comment to, when McGonagall tells Arthur to take a seat after he is late to class, is it meant to be 'bit' and not 'bid'? To me, bid sounds right, yet I don't know if that is what you intended. Just my only comment really.
Absolutely love it!Author's Response: Len ... *dies* Really. I'm going to collapse in a pile of Kalina jelly if this continues. I don't deserve such praise! I am very happy you liked it - and I too felt that second person was the only way I could write it. Blame Gubby for her darned addiction to it. :P She's converted me. I have written second person, actually, another fic of mine, "Insidious Deeds".
But thank you so much! And yes, McGonagall bids him be seated, not bit. XD Bid is correct. ^_^
Thank you so much for this review, Len. ILY. *hugs*
XOXO, Kalina Report Review
EPIC! This is epic Kalina. And not just because it's a wonderfully long one-shot, but because... it just is. I love it!
You characterized Arthur so well, he reminds me a lot of Percy actually. And the ending just caught me and stunned me. I absolutely loved it so much. The way you moved through the story, from the first time he saw her, to the end, when she doesn't know him. The entire thing is wrought so wonderfully. And in SECOND person? I wish I could do that!
The movement from innocence to secrets is compelling, and the way you carried the characters and made it so believable is just astounding. You took a bumbling sort of character who never had much canon flesh, and gave him real life. A terrible, true, totally awesome life.
ONE BILLION DOLLARS! er... [/random Austin Powers reference]
~ShilohAuthor's Response: Where do I begin? First of all, epic? No, you're in the wrong department! Epic is Gubby, or Susan, or, of course, Rita, but certainly not me. It's my longest one-shot, though, so yay!
I have to thank Susan a great deal for the Arthur characterization, because I didn't get him quite right for a lot of the story. XD I guess it's because I don't typically write guys or Weasleys, for that matter? Second person is quickly becoming a new love. I'm sure you could pull it off wonderfully! You do everything wonderfully. :)
He didn't have much canon flesh, he was always just "Ron's weird old dad", so I kind of wanted to play with that. That, and I have a fondness for weird pairings. As heck. And yeah, his life does become rather terrible. D: I'm so mean to him!
No, I love YOU SFM. Thank you so much for this AMAZING review, Shiloh. Seriously. XOXO. Times a billion kajillion (yes, hello middle school!), Kalina Report Review
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