This was such a interesting story. It was from a different era, and I have never read anything that goes so long back. But I enjoyed it.
First of all; Latona - I loved that name. When/how did you come up with it? Anyway, I enjoy the lines that are being said, they just says a lot about the characters. You don't have too much description, but definitely enough. Your story includes some things that are better not described, so I liked the way you wrote it.
I enjoyed the characterization, though you don't see too much of it- but I'm guessing that's the plan- you see enough to feel very sorry for Latona and Nicholas in the end. Heartbreaking ending by the way. I felt so sorry for poor Latona who is all alone in the end - or is she? But I think it was wise of you to end it that way. It just felt right.
Thank you for an amazing story that I really enjoyed reading. You write really well, so I'm probably gonna read some of your other stories in the future. Good job :D
LadyL8Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! :) In reality, I had so much characterization for the both of them; I know so many facts of their lives in my mind, how the met, how they fell in love and got married. Everything. But I could't possibly fit it all in 500 words so I tried to only give some fundamental information and leave out all the rest :)
Latona is a name I love. It's the name of a Greek goddess, the mother of Apollus and Arthemis. It sounds very medieval to me and I just love it :)
I'm really glad you enjoyed the endings. Endings are usually my favourite part in my stories and those which I work mostly on. :) Report Review
You got the whole story captured in 500 words. There shouldn’t be anything more or anything less. I really thought this was very very cute. You had two very interesting characters but I would have loved to know more about them but seeing with the word limit I understand that wasn’t possible.Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. :) Fitting a whole story in 500 words was harder than I first thought because details of the lives of Nick and Latona kept trying to sneak in! I'm glad you liked it. :) Report Review
Aw, this was so cute! I love that you chose to take on more of a plot-driven story for a 500-word challenge. I have found that most of the stories posted for my challenge focus on the characters. It was great to see someone take a risk like this!
This story is heart-breaking, really. It's so lovely to see a pure love story like this one. I was really sad at the end - you did a great job of portraying the emotion of the two characters in a simple, to-the-point way, which is exactly what I was hoping for in this challenge.
Thanks for taking my challenge! I hope you enjoyed yourself ^_^
Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^
.:.Ilia.:.Author's Response: Trying to fit a plot in 500 words was a hard work! I'm glad you liked my story. :] Report Review
That was poignant and sad. Nice work.
PalomaAuthor's Response: Thank you. :] Report Review
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