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Review #1, by Liana Chapter 3

20th October 2009:
This has been strange and interesting. Even though I don't like snakes, it's interesting to see them as familiars here. Hey, we still don't know what the secret potion was. This "gang of three" seems pretty powerful, for being so young. I guess it's good to know that Umbridge isn't discriminating when abusing students. She doesn't care if they're descendents of the founders or muggle-born. She just seems to hate children. I also find this interesting because you are co-authoring. I don't think that happens very often. Are you finding it fun or challenging to write together?

Author's Response: You find out soon enough what the potion does! Trust me, but it took awhile for me to figure out myself what it was going to be. The three HAVE to be powerful! and Umbridge, yea she just hates children! we wanted to make her even more evil which we are going to, we both hated her and so her end is going to be. . . .interesting! about to co-authoring thing, me and my buddy came up with our own version of HP5-7, and we liked our version way better than J.K 's, we find it easy when we are actually coming up with ideas together, but when we dont see each other for awhile it gets hard. Im already a good writer, but she helps fill in some of the gaps.
Ari
P.s, i hope you are lovin it!


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Review #2, by Snapegirl Chapter 4

19th October 2009:
That's terrible! I was glad that Teira could be saved and it was really neat how you did it.

Author's Response: Thanks! I sorta created Teira after myself, so i couldnt just let her die!(besides me and my co author have this story planned all the way to a third book, with Teira,Megumi,and Malia in all of them alive) her parents are awful arent they!Wait till you see what Dumblydore has to say to the three of them!
Ari


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Review #3, by Snapegirl Chapter 3

18th October 2009:
Umbridge is so evil! I can't wait for her to die. I like how Severus acts with them, although at one point I was surprised that Teira kind of had an attitude with him, I wouldn't think Severus would tolerate that. One thing I do think you need to do is make the cousins have some class that they're not really good at, because sometimes it seems like they're too perfect and can do everything. Otherwise this was a good chapter.

Author's Response: The three are actually awful at Divination and just have skipped that particular class, or in Teira's case was too busy being in the hospital wing.
Ari


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Review #4, by Snapegirl Chapter Two

18th October 2009:
That was really different and I liked how they had Malia's cousin and sister come to school. But I think they need some serious therapy here and should be gotten some counseling.

Author's Response: Thats just it, Teira, Malia, and Megumi were brought up wonderfully until the age of about 6, then everything changed for some reason. I dont know the reason yet but i will think of one soon enoughg. Malia is the way she is because of her traumatic past, Teira is the quiet and short tempered way she is because of the way her parents brought her up. Her parents are the worst! !and they should have gotten counseling, but they didnt so. . . .
Ari


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Review #5, by Liana Chapter Two

18th October 2009:
I didn't realize until very recently that you had more chapters up. Wow--all the way through chapter five. That's great! I really liked the boa familiar delivering Malia's mail. And of course she's a parseltongue. There's not many of those. This chapter was interesting. I think you've really got a story there. One problem I think you need to address is, that you need a beta or someone to edit your work. You have some grammatical and spelling errors that detract from the story. I also felt that the story is going too fast. You've got so many interesting things going on that maybe you should slow down and develop some of those ideas more. I'm not saying this to be mean. I've said this to other authors. While I don't write fan fiction I do write for my day job so I have some clue about writing. But, like I said, you have some great and creative ideas and could use someone to edit. I'll keep reading and hang in there, Ari.

Author's Response: Thanks! ! ! !Aboutt he going to fast thing, i'll have to talk to my co author about it, she's created most of the ideas up to about chapter 3, past that i have filled in all the way to chapter six soon to be. But i try my best with some things, most of the times i get my best ideas really late at night so i mess things up. I'll keep all this in mind!
Ari


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Review #6, by Liana Chapter one

6th September 2009:
Well, that was strange but I liked it enough to come back when you post the next chapter. Malia is one bizarre character. Her appearance is exotic and beautiful. So how do she and Snape know each other--and it sounds like they know each other quite well. I really had to chuckle when she referred to her cousin as "cuz." It sounded like the students in the high school I work in.

Author's Response: thanks for the strange part! !my friend loves things to be strange,and as for snape and the slytherins, its coming up! !thanks! !
Ari


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Review #7, by Snapegirl Chapter one

2nd September 2009:
This is a very cool start, and I think Malia is an interesting character. How does Severus know her family? And how powerful is she? I wonder what she'll be like in class?

Author's Response: thank YYOOUU! !Sev and the Slytherins have know each other for a long time, but that info will come later in the story! Malia is REALLY REALLY powerful! ! her cousin Teira(you havent met her yet) is just as powerful and the two of them are really close! She gets detention with Umbridge and Harry! ! ! !Thanks for the advie, my second chapter should be up soon.
Ari


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