This is a pretty interesting idea, I quite like it. I hope you update soon, things are confusing but I think they are meant to be in the first chapter :) You write pretty good and this seems like it'll be a great story.
- SexyDoorFrames Report Review
I, quite frankly, think this is a great idea for a story =]
and I really hope you update soon because I'd love to read (and review, of course) some more of it!
spam_up_samAuthor's Response: thank you! i'm currently editing chapter one, so expect it to be very very different, since i will be handing the pov over to albus. hopefully a chapter two will follow closely after the edited first. thanks very much for the review! Report Review
I like it. I haven't read anything like it before. You write really well. I'm a bit confused, but its only the first chapter. I'm interested to see what you do with this.Author's Response: Thank you very much. This story is actually under serious reconstruction. I've decided to change pov to Albus since it is just more natural. expect a very edited chapter one soon, hopefully followed by chapter two pretty soon as well. thanks again for the review Report Review
I like it, but...
I don't know, there's just something off about it.Author's Response: hm, yes I know it seems a bit confusing right now. I wanted to have an introduction of the girl without revealing too much about what actually happened to her. This chapter is probably going to be edited after i post the second, I also need to work on some grammar things I noticed after submitting the chapter. Thanks for the review! I always appreciate constructive criticism
-Sam Report Review
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