Is she cheating on Ron with Draco? This was so interesting and very good to read. I loved seeing this side to Draco and also this side to Hermione. Seeing them so vulnerable around each other and full of emotion. I found this very enjoyable to read.
10/10

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I really liked this because it was very realistic. The fact they couldn’y be together just fabulous. This is a relationship almost nobody would be happy with. The tense atmosphere was great! This is also one of the few Draco/Hermione stories I read which didn’t seem and didn’t feel out of character. In whcih tower were they actually? In Hogwarts? Also I loved the way you ended the story: As he pressed his lips against hers, he knew it was going to be over. What they had was tainted, and that would never change. It was a memorable ending!

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Georgia!!!

Sorry it took me so long to get to this, love, I sort of didn’t consider the fact that I went back to work this week and that I was working on Jade all day yesterday but it is still a mess :(

Okay so to your review!

I really enjoyed this! I think mostly because it was a very realistic Dramione story. I despise the ones where they are happy because I don’t think they ever could be. I like how here you’ve written Hermione as the one who’s letting him go, not the other way around. She seems to have the control in their relationship, not like how she is usually portrayed as weak (which she clearly is not).

I thought this was very very effective!! You wrote their relationship perfectly and even managed to pull off how difficult it is for them even in such a short amount of words!

Well done! This was another fantastic Dramione one-shot, you continue to slowly convert me to them haha!

xx

Author's Response: Not at all, lovely!

I'm so glad to hear you thought it was realistic! I really liked the idea behind this, though I think I would have been more effective with more words. I may have tried to pack in a bit more than what I could take on in 500 words. And, if Draco and Hermione were to ever genuinely fall in love, I always thought Hermione would hold the strings :)

And thanks so much! Yes, join us - we have tragedy :P

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I liked it as a one shot, it would probably be great as a story, but you did a fantastic job fitting all that emotion and plot into 500 words!
:Dani

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I agree, it would be better as a longer story, I think I stuffed too much plot into this one. Thanks for reading, though, I am glad you liked it!

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:) Nicely done! I enjoyed it, personally. It's intriguing how their closeness is much more of a need kind of thing than a want kind of thing, or at least that is how it seems to me.

Well written! :) Thanks for posting!
Cheers-
Hallows

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, it is very much so a more need than want - thank you for noticing :D That is what makes them come back again and again.

Thanks so much for reading and leaving such a lovely review!

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I can't believe I hadn't reviewed this yet, especially considering how short it is, and the fact that you wrote it (so obviously it's amazing). I was probably scared away by the Dramione. *hides from Dramione* But you write some of the best Dramione ever, so of course I loved it even while disliking the ship. ^_^

It's a great, well-developed little scene, and you made a few minutes really come alive. It's passionate and tense and engaging. You create such great atmosphere in everything you write.

*jealousy*

Loved it!

Melanie

Author's Response: Aghh, you flatter me wayy too much! But I am glad you like it - it really gives me a little thrill when you like my Dramiones, considering your hatred for the ship. Thank you! And I'm so glad you found it engaging - I think I tired to fit too much plot into so few words. Oh well.

Thanks for the review, Mel - and hush with your jealousy! You are much better than I am :)

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Georgia! That was amazing! The tense atmosphere was brilliant and I truly had a sense that the relationship a past. What I mean was, the dialogue wasn't just dialogue- it was so charged and so realistic that the reader could glimpse the past behind it. Even though it's a drastic change from the books, it didn't seem OOC for either of them. Fantastic work.

"I-I can't, I've lied so many times for you-" Please excuse me while my heart goes and breaks in half. I could honestly hear her voice and it gave me chills.

I adored this. I loved the beginning drama and the will-she-come-won't-she-come of it =) Amazing and even though it was short, it was potent. Loved it =) x

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Sarah! I'm really glad you liked it. I'm afraid I didn't do too well for the challenge - I tried to fit too much plot in, I think. The five hundred words couldn't take it, lol.

But thank you for the compliments on the dialogue! This was one of those weirdly inspired dialogue-y pieces were the words just flow pretty naturally. The story started, actually, as dialogue - I wrote out all their lines and added in the description and stuff after. It was odd, haha.

That actually was my favourite line too. It's one of those rare lines where I can see every detail of the scene, and exactly how I wanted it said.

Thank you so much for such a flattering review, Sarah! It really brightened my day, thank you!

Thank you so much for such a wonder

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This was wonderful, Georgia!
It was a very nice take on Dramione and it was filled with a lot of emotion. I think you're dialogue was really effective and it tells such a full story in such a small amount of words. It's truly fantastic ^_^.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Jane! Ah, the plot of this one-shot, I think, kind of killed the story - I think I took on a bit too much for 500 words. But thank you for the compliments, I'm really glad you liked it!

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damn, that was good. its just so short :(

Author's Response: Thank you! The challenge was for 500 words, so...yes. That explains the length :P Thanks for reading!

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The emotional distress was amazing. I mean, really?

I loved every bit of this, Dramione's are basically win. I adore how most of this piece is dialogue. You express the emotions through dialogue, at least, more than through motion and silence. I adore that, really, because I can't express emotion through spoken words. Odd, really. Most authors use descriptions to convey a feeling or tone, but you set it with verbal words. That's just amazing ^_^

Other than that, there isn't much to say. I love everything you write, it's always mind blowing XD

Wonderful job, hon. Keep at it?!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you!

Dramione is definitely my guilty pleasure :D And I am a big fan of dialogue, so this was basically my love, haha. Thank you so much for the kind words! You literally blew me away - I'm glad you found the dialogue so powerful, it was the aim seeing as there were so few words to work with :)

Thanks so much! Your reviews are always so kind, thank you!

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Not much a fan of Dramione, but oooh, I liked this a lot. Emotion and passion and tears. I loved the line where she said that everytime he touches her, he hurts her because she knows they can't be together completely. Powerful stuff. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it despite the ship (which, I know, a lot of people don't like). I liked that line too, thank you for pointing it out! Again thanks again for this kind review!

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Okay, I've got to admit that generally I'm not a huge fan of Dramione, but I really did love this all the same! Your writing was completely beautiful, and I'm amazed that you managed to fit so much emotion into such a short piece. I think this particular plot/scene was a really good one to pick for a challenge like this, as well, because the length gave it a sort of intensity which worked really well.

Anyway, a definite favourite! 10/10 :)

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! You flatter me way too much - your reviews are always so lovely! I thought the plot/scene was good, because I could put in a lot of feeling wihtout really going into details :) Thank you so much for the awesome review! You're so lovely ♥

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I thought this was really good for 500 words. It was really well rounded, I really liked the ending and I liked how it wasn't too specific in what the actual situation was, which made the feelings more pronounced. The only thing I would say is that it was a bit overdone in the cliche'd descriptions. Otherwise, very good.

Author's Response: Thank you! You'd think I would avoid the cliches with only 500 words to work with ;) But I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

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Amazing. :D Though, can I ask in what tower were they in? Or did you say that in the story? In which case I would be a complete arse. lol.

Anyway, brilliant little story. The language was beautiful, the descriptions were perfect, and everything was just nice, as per usual with your stories. ;D

You might just get me into liking Dramiones. ;D 100/10

Author's Response: I actually left that up to the reader, where the tower was, but I think it's just an abandoned castle or something. Ruins, you know? Just somewhere they could escape from everything. But that's me - you could have your own theory ;)

Thank you so much for the lovely review! I hope that you do turn; come to "the dark side", so to speak - it's great here ;) Thanks again! I'm so glad you like it :D

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This was really good. It had a lot of emotion in it and passion. Very vague, which made it more interesting. I can't really comment on much, seeing as it wasn't that long, but I love it. I really do. Wonderful!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! I enjoyed writing this, so it means a lot to hear you liked it :) Thank you!

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Hi! So glad to see you took my challenge ^_^

I really like this piece. It's beautiful. The idea of Dramione ending is tragic, actually. It feels as though they should never have been together in the first place, but seeing them break up is more upsetting. You wrote this really well - everything was clear and concise. I loved every bit of it.

Especially this bit: Her hair tangled in the cold wind, and he thought she had never looked so beautiful. I am obsessed with this sentence. I have to wonder if you hadn't been confined to five hundred words, if you would have come up with as KILLER a sentence as this one. That's a compliment, of course, if even a twisted one. XD

Anyway, thank you so much for taking my challenge! I hope you had fun ^_^

Great story!

.:.Ilia.:.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Dramione breaking up is terrible, right? I can never quite get them to come off happily :(

As for the line you pointed out, I actually wanted to write a little bit more for that sentence, but I was nearing the 500 mark and I still had a bit to cover :) But I'm glad you liked it, thank you for the compliment!

And of course I had fun - I was writing a Draco/Hermione, my new favorite obsession :D Haha, thank you so much for the wonderful review! This was a great challenge :)

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i loved it o.o it was sad, but very very good.. very well-written =D
so sad :/

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it!

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First review! It was lovely.^_^ It's funny that this is also a Dramione.:) Perhaps Dramione's are made for 500-word one-shots.:) I'd love an expanded version, luv.(: I'm a great fan. ^^ ~~Carla

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Haha, I've been on quite a Draco/Hermione kick lately, so this really didn't surprise me. I was going to do something lighter, but angst seemed more appropriate :) Thank you so much for reading - as for an expanded version, I have already started - started being posted one chapter and am stuck on the second - a Draco/Hermione with a similar theme (affair, post-Hogwarts, etc.) so I doubt this will get another version :( Sorry! But thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I'm really glad you liked it!

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