I must say I loved this chapter, I'm also liking this side to Sirius it's kind of original. Anyway I like that we got more in depth with your oc, and once again the cannon characterizations have been spot on.
Anyways keep up the good work,
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Hello Joy here,
First off I'd like to apologize for how long it's taken me to review, anyways I'll get to it now.
I think your story has a lot of potential and am really liking the cannon characterizations. It was a little on the short side, but that's not to big of a deal. Your begging could use some work too, it wasn't bad or anything but their was no real introduction. Also I would like to get more in depth with your cannon.
Other than that though I think your doing a lovely job.
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Another good chapter, the guys are such jerks! Well not remus he apoligised lol. I have to say the frilly bras was a stroke of genius lol :) Report Review
Okay, my initial thought on this story is that it does have a lot of potential :)
I really like what we've seen of Sirius and Louisa's relationship so far, and I think that the plot is very interesting.
However, I think that you need to put a bit more information into the chapter. You haven't gone into much detail about any of the characters, especially Louisa, your own character who we don't know that much about.
I would suggest a beta to help you build up your story and read it through before you put it up. It is of course your decision on whether you want a beta or not, but I would be happy to help if you want it :)
I look forward to reading the rest of this story
:)Author's Response: Thanks, you gave some good advice about getting a beta, I'll think about it :)
It's great to get some feedback, and I'll try and take your suggestions into account for later chapters.
Thanks again, Nagini_Weasley. Report Review
This is really good, can't wait for the next one :)Author's Response: Thanks so much for the nice review! It's great to get good feedback. The next chapter is waiting to be validated, so it should be up soon. Thanks, Nagini_Weasley :) Report Review
i like this. very funny. Lou is nice aswell- her and sirius are funny together. write more- you should get a banner aswell!Author's Response: Thanks, it's great to get good feedback! I am trying to get a banner at the moment, so that should be good. Thanks again, Nagini_Weasley :) Report Review
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