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Review #1, by Silent_Fire Loss

4th September 2009:
“Loss” is all about the life of a ghostly house elf—what a novel idea! It's a shame, though, because while it's rather interesting, nothing is really experienced in the story. Instead it's a report of events. Of course, the Staff Challenge it was written for required a one-shot, but if this were lengthened it seems it'd do much better. (5/10 – Hopefully Readers Get to See a Polished Version of This Story Sometime in the Future!)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Silent_Fire! I'm sorry you didn't like the way the story was told, but thank you for alerting me to that weakness; not having much of a turn for action, I guess I just didn't notice. :) Ah well, thanks anyway! And if I ever have the inclination to I might certainly polish it up a bit :D

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Review #2, by Alopex Loss

17th August 2009:
Well, I get to be the first reviewer, and I hope other people discover this story too. I found this to be a wonderfully written piece. I don't see many stories with house elves as important characters, and I always like seeing out-of-the-ordinary things such as this. I like the way you used Noddy's recollections, sparked by the death of Cedric Diggory, to tell a story. And you did it ALL through Noddy's thoughts without one whit of dialogue! Impressive. I enjoyed Noddy throughout, despite how depressed and miserable he is and what a pitiful figure he cuts.

I don't always like this style of story-telling, because I think it's very easy for authors to begin basically writing a glorified list. You have mostly avoided any list-like feel, despite listing/describing all that happened. (That made sense in my head.)

The death scene of Master Duncan was really well-written. You snuck that in on me. I was expecting a battle of some sort, but no, Noddy just discovers his body. I had to read that part a second time, because I didn't want to accept the death as true! I'm impressed with the way you made an unimpressive death seem so poignant.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! You've made my day. I'm glad you enjoyed it; I loved writing it. I've never read a story with a house elf as a protagonist, so the idea kind of stuck when I thought of it... linking it with Cedric was irresistible, too, and I'm glad that worked out! As for the death scene... rather than a huge mess, the simple way of leaving seemed more suitable. Not everyone involved in conflict has to fight to the finish, I'd think. I've said it before, but I'm still glad you enjoyed it. :)

Thanks so much for the review; it's very much appreciated.


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