Loved it! but you might want to fix the second sentence. it's the wrong point of view. Other than that i i think it's awesome! It has a good plot. Report Review
finish and call me in virgina! Report Review
hey that was pretty good im bored in virgina! Report Review
Oh my goodnes!!! Really?? A cliff hanger?? Gah!! I loovvveee this story...Continue it please!! Report Review
This is really good so far!
it would be cool if it had a banner, in case you don't know how to get one, go to Google, type in the Dark Arts, it's the first link. When you get there, click on request a banner and the instructions are pretty much self-explanitory from there. Good job so far!!:) Report Review
Awww that's so sad!! Please update soon! It's really good so far!! Good Job! :)Author's Response: Thanks! I haven't gotten to update in a while because of school and exams and all but I'm finally free! So I'll try to update regularly now. :) Report Review
Oh -that final paragraph is SO sad! I'm sure she's wrong about James, but it's heartbreaking that she thinks his feeling have changed.
PalomaAuthor's Response: Yeah I know it's sad but I needed to do that so that the rest of the story makes sense.
I am not sure when my next update will be seeing as I have almost no spare time even on the weekends so I am sorry to say that the next time I update may be as late as the middle of October.
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I really like that you've only hinted at the plan. It makes me really want to read more!
PalomaAuthor's Response: Well, if I spill the whole plan then no one will stick around to read the rest of the story, now would they? ;)
The next chapter is in validation as I type, I hope you like it.
Thanks for reviewing! :D Report Review
Congratulations on your very first fan fic - it's well done! Great characterizations of Lily and James - I LOVE that she likes him in spite of herself, on a subconscious level.
Off to read the next chapter.
PalomaAuthor's Response: Thank you, thank you thank you for reviewing! *Sighs greatly* I was beginning to think no one liked this fan fic...I figured that Lily always liked James but she never really wanted to show it because he was the only one who loved her in spite of her being very rude to him. Thanks again for reviewing! :) Report Review
I think it's OK. The one thing I didn't like about it was that it seemed like it moved too fast...so, if you could fix that in the next few chapters, you might have some really good work here.Author's Response: Thanks! You were the first reviewer! It means a lot to me that you took the time to review. Really, it does.
I agree, it did move a bit too fast in the beginning and the next 2 chapters may seem that way too but after that I am pretty sure that it will move at a steady pace. Thanks again for reviewing! :D Report Review
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