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Review #1, by Megan and Charly love HP Disturbia

25th August 2009:
AWW! I loved it! so amazing! You did an awesome job! YOu NEED to write more Lily and James stories! I swear to read them all! Please~ *Claps and a cookie* _Charly

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Review #2, by Natures Nobility Disturbia

25th August 2009:
I reeeally liked it.
Awesome idea, really imaginative, and all the italicised phrases made the hairs on my neck stand up!
Really good.

Author's Response: Um wow! Thanks for the great review!n And I'm glad you were creeped ^.^ lol

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Review #3, by dancingwiththemoon Disturbia

15th August 2009:
Congrats on your first publication!
Just a few tips:
-I'd put a bit more of a summary on the front page. Sometimes it takes more than a pretty banner to draw in readers.
-You're imagery was excellent. You definitely have a knack for this whole writing thing and putting the reader in a new world.
-Sometimes I felt that the song didn't really flow with the story. Like, it easily could have lived without it. Or, you could have totally revamped it in a new direction. Make the whole thing not be a test, and have Voldy jump out and this massive duel. Just an example.

Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the tips! I totally understand about the summary- I was actually going to change it in a few minutes

Thanks for the compliment! I was really worried about it actually Dx

And once I re-read it, I kinda figured that, too. But then-- idk I might have gotten lazy, haha. But you're right, it could have done without the song.

Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #4, by Noel Weasley Disturbia

14th August 2009:
Wow. That was one *ahem* kick-ass story! And I say, well done! This is a very good story for it being your first, and I don't believe I noticed any grammar or spelling mistakes in this selection. :D yay!

I love the plot for the story. I never would have guessed that it all was a test for Lily and the Marauders! The writing was so descriptive, it felt as if I was actually there, along side Lily the whole time. And I enjoyed the lyrics from the song, Disturbia. It added a nice touch to the whole thing.

I can't wait to see what other stories you come up with in the future. I'll keep an eye out for them!


Author's Response: Wow! What an awesome response. Thank you so much for reviewing, I honestly didn't think anyone would, haha. I'm glad you liked the twist and stayed tuned! I have more up my sleeve :D

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