:o Have a nice day?!? Haha, Oh my goodness! Well that certainly wasn't the ending I expected!
When I read the story summary, I expected something similar to this (though admittedly not the ending), but when I read the first few lines, for some reason I thought it was going to be about Nick and the Bloody Baron getting back at Peeves. And then when the student showed up I remembered the summary... :P
Nick's story is absolutely terrible! (I mean that in a good way!) And I loved that you referred to Sirius as the only other person to have asked Nick about why he was (nearly) beheaded.
I'll admit, when Nick said that he was seen performing magic, I thought he was going to say that the muggles tried to behead him for being a wizard... you know, "Salem witch trials" type-thing. I'm rather pleased that it wasn't, though; this way it gives us more of a sense of just how long magic and the Ministry have been around.
Anyway, great story dear, with a shocking ending!
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This was a very interesting one-shot. I don't think that I've ever before read a story that explained why he got his head chopped off (and doesn't that sound rather nasty!).
Your explanation was certainly interesting- Sir Nicholas sounded very foolish, to have performed magic in front of all of those muggles. However, I was a little surprised that he had his head chopped off for that- it seems a little harsh for a little mistake that was fixed with the modification of the muggles' memories. Whenever I've thought about how he got his head chopped off (not that I've spent much time thinking about it, mind you) I'd thought it would have been because of something more knight-ly. A scandal in the court, possibly. But anything that enraged the Ministry works, of course!
I liked how Sir Nicholas dealt with Peeves- it seems to be the only method that works (unless you're the Bloody Baron, of course). I did think it was a little odd that Peeves said "Uh oh" when he saw Sir Nicholas, though- I thought he would be more the type to laugh and say "Catch me if you can"... He doesn't fear many people.
As well, I think that Nate was a cute little Hufflepuff. He worked perfectly as the person to ask Sir Nicholas about his story. I do think that you could have added a little bit more physical description of him, though... It would make it easier to imagine the scene as they walk down the hall, since we already know what Sir Nicholas looks like.
All in all, this is a really cute one-shot and I enjoyed your perspective on how Sir Nicholas got his head removed (or, only partially removed). Good work! Report Review
You provided a very unique and interesting reason for Nick's Death. I wouldn't have imagined it that way. Very nice job.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! :) Report Review
This was a really neat concept for a one-shot. Of course there would be curious students over the years at Hogwarts who think nothing of asking Nick how he had almost lost his head. Nick always seemed rather prim and proper, so it would be interesting to see how he reacted to that. :) And, plus, we never did find out why he was beheaded...
There were a few points where Nick's speech seemed to be a little too informal, but, other than that, I really liked this. :) It was a creative story and a pretty realistic reason behind Nick's execution. It was good that Nick hesitated before he launched into the story; I would have expected nothing less from him.
I have to say: the ending was priceless. The gory image of him being beheaded juxtaposed with the, "Have a nice day!" made me laugh out loud!
Great job!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!
You know, I completely forgot to pay attention to how I made Nick talk when I was writing this. Thank you for pointing that out. I'll go back and try to fix it when I get a chance. :)
Hahah I love how he goes from talking about getting axed 45 times to saying "Have a nice day!" That made me laugh (:
This was a nice little oneshot. I have to admit I never thought about why he got his head cut off, but I like your explaination, it's rather funny (:
-Ronsgirl29Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
When I finished writing his story, I was trying to figure out how to end it and I thought that making him act like he had never told the story would lighten the mood of it a bit, but still fit his character.
I'm glad you liked it! :) Report Review
I like Nearly Headless Nick and I'm happy you have chosen to write about him. I think there is a song which was cut off the books about how Nick was beheaded, and I think it's somewhat different than this so you probably didn't base this on that. I liked your idea however. He makes such a little mistake and then it all ends up so badly. Poor Nick. :(
This is well written with good grammar and spelling, but I felt that there was still something about the flow. I can't really pinpoint it, and say what exactly you should do, so sorry about that, but in the beginning it felt like it was a bit choppy and didn't flow that well. Otherwise I liked it.
I also liked your idea that not many had asked about his beheading and that you made it a bit of a house secret. And of course Sirius is just the person to have asked about that.Author's Response: I got the idea for him giving her a tusk when he was fixing her teeth from the song that was taken out of the books, but that's it.
I'll try to figure out how to make it flow better, and see if I can fix it.
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Have a nice day? O_o Man, I loved that ending! Like, who could have a nice day after hearing about that? It was so abrupt. I liked it though. It just seemed Nick-ish. It was a great way to end a serious, unpleasant segment of story on an amusing and lighter note. I also thought it was interesting the way you drew a distinction between why and how Nick wasn't completely beheaded.Author's Response: I felt like ending it that way seemed like something Nick would do. I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
I wish it were a longer explanation, but poor Nick! Silly Peeves..afraid of the Bloody Baron..bah..silly, silly, boy ;). I laughed though, when I read that someone had spilled potion and caused warts to grow on their skin - in any Potions situation, that'd probably be me. :D I loved this!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
Hahaha, that's so silly. I think this could've been a little bit longer, but I loved the idea of him giving her a tusk. Nice job! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
wow, that was sad! but i really liked it! great job! *hands you brownie*Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
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