Okay, first of all there are a lot of spelling and grammatical mistakes in this chapter. Some look like simple typing errors so we can work out what the word is suppose to say, however I would suggest that you read through to change these.
It may be an idea to get a beta for this story, you will find that some readers will be put off by bad spelling and punctuation so if you get a someone to proof read your writing before you put it on here, you may get some new readers. If you want any help, or want to know where you can find a beta just let me know, I'll be happy to help you or point you in the right direction :)
The overall plot of the story is very interesting, the fact that the Malfoys moved in next door to the Weasleys has a lot of potential for some funny moments. I think you've definitely got a lot of good material to work with.
I like your characterisation of Ron and Hermione, I love how Ron is very protective of Rose but Hermione is much more relaxed about it all. I'm also a sucker for a Rose/Scorpius relationship so I love that :)
But, good start you should definitely continue with this story!Author's Response: I would really like to take you up on that beta advice, I'll send you a message I think. Thank you so much Report Review
I liked it very much
Especially the idea of the Malfoys moving next to Ron Weasley, I could just imagine how much Draco would enjoy occasionally annoying him on purpose. Oh the possibilities! lol
It was really cute, Rose and Scorpius' relationship.
I'll look out for the next chapter definetly =]
spam_up_samAuthor's Response: You are awesome, thank you! Report Review
I really like it.
Please write more!Author's Response: Thank you!
Look out for the next chapter soon! Report Review
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