So Draco has finally got the information he wants, now I'm curious as to what Luna plans to show him or tell him & how Draco's going to take it.
Even though Luna only appeared for a blink-and-you'll-miss -her moment, she felt like Luna to me, she is such a hard character to write, and the little snippets we have seen of her she has been well written.
Looking forward to more!Author's Response: The next chapter is still in the works (aka, in my brain), but their encounter will shake Draco in a major way. Luna is very sage, despite her quirkiness, and her words are going to deeply affect him.
Luna has always seemed rather etheral to me, so her floating in and out of the story in an almost ghost/angel-like manner seemed pretty natural in my mind. Glad you like it :) Report Review
Now I see what you meant when you said that Pansy was going to help Draco out, that was a good way of getting him to find out the information, from the most unlikley source & someone who he would have avoided if possible.
I thought you showed Draco's cowardly side very well, taking him back to his first year when he ran from the Forbidden Forest in detention with Harry. As we know he's not a coward to that extent after everything he did in HBP, but when he can run away, then he does.Author's Response: Yes, I really wanted Pansy to help out in a very inadvertant way because 1) it would show that Draco needs people more than he believes he does and 2) Pansy is almost as much fun to write as Luna!.
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Luna was great! I especially loved the end line!
Draco is still coming along well, you're still keeping Draco's own feelings of status alive with his reactions to the second round of carriage. I like the fact that you aren't delving into his mind too deeply all at once and also kept his first meeting with Luna brief, it really makes me want to read more to see if she helps him in the same way she does Harry.Author's Response: The end line was my favorite as well! I wrote it before I wrote most of the chapter, actually...haha. I am very glad you enjoyed Draco's thoughts. He very much considers class and status in everything he does, so I wanted to keep that. Please keep reading! And thank you for reviewing! Report Review
Luna & Draco are my fave characters and my ultimate ship, so I was thrilled to spot this story about them, -even if tehy aren't romantically linked :-(
Anyway, I really liked the first chapter, Pansy was little bit of light relief in the middle lol, poor Pansy. I'd just like to say to watch out that you don't make her the usual FF Pansy!
I've no complaints about the way you wrote Draco, he seems to be coming along nicely for the first chapter and looking forward to seeing where you take him.Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing :) You just made my week! I will definitely keep your advice in mind concerning Pansy. She comes more into play in the third chapter and actually lends a bit of hand in Draco's search for answers. I hope she's not too cliched, however!
I hope you keep reading! Thank you again! Report Review
hhmmm.not really sure about this. you and your wacko mcgriddle-loving best friend must have been on something. couldn't have been the whining and bowel movements of said-best friends kitty could it? oh wait...that was a different mickey d's viist ;)
anyway, it's lovely and wonderful. you've done an excellent job of journeying into draco's change of heart after the 6th book. also, who doesn't want a bit more of our favorite slytherin when we're bored of hearing about the trio's prolonged camping trip? i certainly do :) anyway, a few grammatical errors here and there that i know would bother you...but easy to fix. We've already discussed my other suggestions for this chapter and i'm very pleased with your genius in this story :) i can't wait for the next chapters!Author's Response: I have four words for you, my RLBFF: Oh, do be quiet!
(But I love you, and you know that) Report Review
I really like this chapter. Its brilliant!! I like this especially as it seems like he's turning away from the death eaters, but is kind of stuck. Like, he knows its wrong, but its what it is and he has to just live with it?? Should be a really interesting story, hope you have loads of fun writing it!!
p.s What the hell are McGriddles?? I mean, we have McNuggets and stuff, but McGriddles?? Thats the onyl part of this story I didn't understand lol.Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing (you're my very first!, so double thanks are in order! haha)! Yes, that is exactly how I was hoping to portray Draco in this story, so I'm really glad that's what you got out of this. I hope you continue to enjoy the story!
And McGriddles are part of McDonald's breakfast menu. They have these pancake-like buns with tiny pockets of syrup in them and are filled with either bacon, egg, and cheese; sausage; and I think sausage and cheese (I may have the fillings wrong). But they are delicious! :) yum... Report Review
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