This is RonNiffler here with your review!
I never use to be a big fan of one-shots, but I'm starting to enjoy them now! So I was very excited to read yours!
It's hard to write about a character that JK Rowling has already told us so much about. So I give you props on that. And you did a good job with it!
Draco was very believable! The perfect amount of anger and fear! I can defiantly see Draco freaking out before killing Albus.
The flow was really good. I have no complaints about it!
Your detail was fantastic! I for one struggle at times to put detail in, but you seemed to have no problem with it!
There were a couple sentences that felt a bit acquired. They made sense and all that, but maybe rephrasing them.
Other then that I really don't have any more complaints. It was a bit short, but there is nothing wrong with that.
All in all it was a good one-shot!Author's Response: I'll definitely look into the believability of my sentences and such.
Thank you so much for the review and for taking the time, I really appreciate it!
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How intriguing! That Adeline character is very interesting.I want more of her! And I've always been very interested in Draco, especially in HBP, and this was a very nice portrayal of him at that time. Really great job! This is very well-written and overall a very refreshing story. 10/10 definitely!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm thinking about starting a story about her, but Johanna definitely takes first priority.
HBP Draco was just so much more fascinating, I always thought; he became human.
Thank you so much for your review, and I'm glad that you found it refreshing! I appreciate your input and I hope to have something else Adeline related out soon!
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