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Review #1, by BluEyedAngel Memory Search Engines and Worried Thoughts of the Past

10th August 2009:
Adorable! I like your twins; they are cool characters. I look forward to seeing how they develop.

One super random thing: there is SO much space between every line of dialog (2-4 lines of space). You may wish to bring it down to one space between each line. It makes it harder to read and also sort of "dims" the emotion of the piece. (My opinion, so be sure to ask for other opinions as well.)

Thanks for a good read!

Author's Response: i no. i was trying to fix it but every tim i put one space it put like to many so i just couldnt be stuffed trying anymore coz id already spent half n hour on the spaces. thanks thou!

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