YES! I love these new developments! Can't wait to see what happens in the next chapters...Although I really think Charlie needs that potion.
:) Report Review
Really looking forward to more so please update again soon!Author's Response: I'm working on a new update now! Hopefully it won't be too long *fingers crossed* Report Review
I'm really enjoying this story so far and I can't wait for the next one to come out! I like how Charlie is friends with a bunch of guys, guys that actually are in the books. I find that with a lot of stories, authors make up girl best friends for their original characters, so it was a nice change.Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Charlie will be getting some girl friends, although they will never be as good as friends as the guys are! Report Review
I loved this chapter and the fact that is was longer. You have a really nice writing style and I highly enjoy reading your story. Please update soonAuthor's Response: You're in luck! I just submitted a longer chapter for validation! I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Report Review
Ah, every girl needs some girl-friends, lovely chapter once more :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Charlie is going to get some girl-friends, but no one would be able to replace her boys :) Report Review
That was a wonderful chapter!! I must read moreAuthor's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Be sure to keep your eyes open for a new chapter soon! Report Review
This seems like it will be a good story! Please update it soon! I really hope that Charlie and Oliver get together! :DAuthor's Response: Who knows what the world has in store for them? Although...there might be some events that answer that in upcoming chapters! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I had wondered what had happened to this fic! Glad you're back on it, I look forward to moreAuthor's Response: There's a new chapter just submitted for validation, so keep your eyes open! Report Review
One of the few OC stories I think I'll enjoy, you have an excellent eye for characterisation and everything is really believable so far. I'm interested to see where it goes - please update soon!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I didn't get to update soon, but there is a new chapter up - just got validated today :) Enjoy! Report Review
I really enjoy this story, and its a very nice/refreshing idea!!!
keep writing! even if you have stopped, this story could gain a lot of popularity if it had some more substanceAuthor's Response: Thank you for reading! I haven't stopped writing, I just can't find the time to do so with school and work. I'm glad you enjoyed to story thus far and hope that you'll continue to read once the new chapter(s) are published! Report Review
Another great chapter!! i like how oliver and charlie argue and roger and cedric see it as a sign of they're undying love :) PGAuthor's Response: Thank you! It is a sign of their undying love...friendship wise. Report Review
I love this story so far and i cannot wait to see how you develop Charlie and the boy's relationships with one another. I think Charlie should probably get some girlfriends but only maybe one or two. I just can't see her not confiding or hanging out with the boys. As for anti-apparating, where would the fun in that be? I look forward to reading more about Oliver's bad timing! hee hee! Keep up the excellent work! I will definitely be staying with this story!Author's Response: Eh, there probably wouldn't be any fun if there was an anti-apparating charm. Thank you for the review and I'm glad that you'll be sticking with it! Report Review
Great start! I love Oliver :) there isn't enough stories about him out there! I really like how the 4 are friends even though they're in different houses and i love how they're all so comfortable with each other :) Off to read the next chapter now! PGAuthor's Response: There aren't enough stories about Oliver! Thank you for the review and hope you enjoy the next chapter! Report Review
i love this story so far! i can't wait for you to continue. Cedric and Oliver are my favorites and there just aren't enough stories. I love the interesting premise too!! great writing style!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Sorry it's taking so long, but I submitted the next chapter two nights ago, so keep an eye out for it! Report Review
I like it, it's interesting and I like the way you write (:
It'll be a refreshing change if Charlie and Oliver DONT get together
Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm glad you like it, and interesting idea... I guess you'll just have to wait and see what goes on with Charlie and Oliver ;) Report Review
I really like how you worked this chapter. A lot of writers will have the main character describe themselves. What they look like, family life and their story. They just talk and talk and nothing interesting would happen. For example: 'Hi my name is blah-blah-blah and this is my story, I have this color hair, that color eyes etc. and this is why i am interesting.'
But the way you set this up, it really kept my attention and made me want to read more. You didn't need any dialogue to spice this up. I remained very intrigued and I cannot wait to see where you take this story. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad it was able to keep your attention; I was afraid that people would think it was too boring without dialogue. But I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
I really like this story! I think you have a great beginning and I can't wait to read more. The concept of the four House captains being best friends is very original and interesting.
A little constructive crit: in some places, it seems as if you have a bunch of different tenses jumbled together. As in, you use past tense, then jump to present, and then future. I see why you would do this, but it makes this narration a little confusing. Also, I know you haven't really even begun the story part yet, but I hope you make the fact that Charlie is in Slytherin believable (it seems like you will); I know that not everyone in Slytherin is bad, but they do tend to be snobby/ambitious/cunning. But no worries!
You are off to an amazing start...keep up the good work!
--evieAuthor's Response: I know...I'm horrible with past and present tense and I can never seem to find out where they change when I go through and edit. Thanks for pointing that out to me and I'll keep a closer eye on it for later chapters. Thank you so much for the review and I'm so very happy you enjoy the story so far! Report Review
Great story, hope you update soon.Author's Response: Thank you! I'm currently figuring out the basics for the next chapter. So, it should be out soon! Report Review
This looks so good! Awesome chapter, I'm really excited for the next one.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
I'm liking this very much :)
I think it's going to turn out very nicely, I like the sleepover rotation and "too many accents going on there" bit.
can't wait for the next chapter :)Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you so much! I'm so glad that you liked the first chapter, the second one will be out soon! Report Review
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