good start non of my stories won't follow the books I hate how harry's life was I love all the battles, all the fun but I hate the people died in my stories james, lily their parents, remus, tonks,fred, sirius and doppy will never died in my stories they will die normal way not from a coward and hedwig will live too

Author's Response: I couldn't belive some of those people died in the books!!! and after reading countless marauder fics, I am totally in love with them too! Thanks for reading it!

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the stiry is a bit wierd and the second chapter is completley rubbish!!

Author's Response: I'm sorry! I know what you mean, it is a little all over the place. I just needed away for everyone to be there. I have been trying to get better though.

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urm the last paragraph is doubled... is that supposed to be that way?

Author's Response: no, my computer was being all stuffed up at the time sorry!

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This is a great chapter, I bet Jo would approve. Maybe write a little more in the chapters though. This is really great and heartfelt. Best fanfiction I've ever read!

Author's Response: Oh thanks!!! I'm glad you liked it. I kind of wrote on my itouch at first so it looked a lot longer than it actually was but I fixed that mistake and hopefull the third chapter will be a lot longer!

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